Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Being rich is the blessings of God through our ancestors. At the same time using it in a right way is a good opportunity because our destination is heaven in the end. If we strive to go from where we have come, we have to utilze richness in a right and correctly. Other side being rich is a test provided by God for us. So, we have to use it wisely and correctly.

I totally disagree the misuse of money especially spending lavishly on the occasion like marriages, birthdays, anniversaries etc instead help the poor in need.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.5

The response presents a clear position regarding whether helping others is the most important aspect of being rich, disagreeing with the notion of misuse and highlighting the importance of charity and avoiding lavish spending. However, the text is severely under-length, containing only 97 words compared to the required minimum of 250 words. Because of this major task constraint failure, the ideas remain heavily under-developed and the response is restricted to a very minimal treatment of the prompt. Consequently, it cannot achieve a passing grade for Task Achievement under IELTS guidelines.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The writing exhibits basic paragraphing and some rudimentary attempts at logical flow, such as transitioning from personal beliefs about wealth to disagreeing with specific misuses of money. However, the overall organizational structure is fragmented and very brief. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as 'Other side being rich is a test', which fails to provide smooth inter-sentence links. Paragraphing is disjointed due to the extremely short length of the text, preventing any sustained progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The student uses a very limited and repetitive vocabulary set, relying on basic terms like 'rich', 'money', 'help', and 'God'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'utilze richness in a right and correctly' and 'disagree the misuse of money', where prepositions or parts of speech are misused. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a very simple idea, the lack of range and frequent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to a lower band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and poorly controlled complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity, such as 'Being rich is the blessings of God' (subject-verb agreement), 'utilze richness in a right and correctly' (redundancy and incorrect word form), and 'on the occasion like marriages' (missing plural article). Although some sentences are understandable, the high frequency of basic structural and mechanical errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band.

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