Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some indivuals believe that one of the vital thing about being rich is that they are having the opportunity to help people. I partially agree with this view because they are having lots of resources and methods to help other,But at the same time,I partially disagree with this view because they are having arrogance and
Firstly, Superior people have lots of resources with whom they can help poor people to improve lifestyle and their overall growth. For instance, Rich people need to take an initative for helping the poor kids in their education and for their malnutrition as well. Secondly, Rich indivuals also having the strong bond with the government authorities so they should have to talk to the higher authorities to help other individuals about how we can imporve their overall growth.
On the other hand, rich people is also having an attitude on their face and they barely talk well with the poor people. They always think that they are superior than other indivuals. For instance, Rich people not treat well their servants and helpers they always scolding and shouted them unnecessarily after completion of their task successfully. Secondly, Rich people waste lots of their money on uncertain things like on parties, clubs etc but they will not help poor people.
In Conclusion, Being rich is one of the great thing but using that power to help others is the best way to show your kindness, But at the same time rich indivuals barely help other people for improve their lifestyle. I believe that rich people should have to take initative to help other people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the potential of rich people to help others and the counter-argument regarding their potential arrogance or self-absorption. A clear position is presented in the introduction and reinforced in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas tends to be slightly repetitive and lacks depth, particularly in the body paragraphs where examples like "parties, clubs etc" are quite general and underdeveloped. Phrases like "rich people is also having an attitude on their face" reflect a tendency to over-generalise rather than fully extend the arguments with sophisticated supporting details. Consequently, the response aligns best with the Band 6 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into logical paragraphs with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. Transitional markers such as "Firstly", "Secondly", and "On the other hand" are used to sequence ideas, although some cohesive devices are mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is occasionally faulty, such as in the phrase "rich people is also having an attitude on their face and they barely talk well", where pronouns and connectors create slight disjointedness. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and the overall progression is discernible, making the text coherent overall, which corresponds closely to a Band 6 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common phrases such as "overall growth", "malnutrition", and "government authorities". However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, including spelling and formulation mistakes like "indivuals" instead of individuals, "vital thing" instead of things, and "scolding and shouted them unnecessarily". These errors occasionally cause strain, but they do not completely impede communication. Because the vocabulary range is sufficient yet constrained by repetitive phrasing and inaccuracies, a Band 5.0 score is most appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and auxiliary verbs, such as "rich people is also having", "they are having lots of resources", and "rich people should have to take initative". Punctuation is also problematic in places, notably with run-on sentences and comma splices like "help other,But at the same time,I partially disagree". While the meaning can still be understood, the high frequency of structural and mechanical errors places this response firmly at Band 5.0.
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