Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Some people believe that one of the most thing being a rich for the other helps is vey crusious and they can help their for every sides.What you are agree from this or not agree discuss both points and give &share your opinions.
The most important point being a rich is very main point here. Some people has faith that which people has vey big amount and other powerfull and expensive things like cars, bank balance and other expensive things thier need thar they do help poor people. But moslty people do not think for about it. Both are thinkings are felixible but they do not know how we can arrange these activites or how we can provides this kind of opportunities for the poor people.
On the other hand, in some country few peolpe are which provides and help each other. And they mostly helps of poor people in thier bad circumstances.But here in my cities people do not have this kind of heart. They think just for oneselff and they do not help others.
Being a rich is not important being a unique and have a sweet herted is very inportant and then they will do this kind of activities otherwise not.
In the conculsin, being a rich is one the most important factor for others help but here is important that they do not create pride inner. In my opinion which people are rich and a lot of money should them that they will do other poor people which they have need.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether helping others is the most important aspect of being rich. However, the position is difficult to discern due to confusing phrasing such as 'Being a rich is not important being a unique and have a sweet herted is very inportant'. While some relevant ideas about philanthropy and wealth are mentioned, they are underdeveloped, unclear, and heavily obscured by language errors. The arguments lack clear extension and supporting evidence, resulting in a limited treatment of the task. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptor, where the task is addressed only minimally and ideas are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is problematic. Although paragraphing is attempted, the overall progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs are awkward or missing, leading to abrupt shifts in topic—for instance, moving erratically from definitions of wealth to local civic behavior and then to moral attributes. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and referencing is frequently unclear, as seen in expressions like 'Both are thinkings are felixible'. The text lacks a clear logical flow and systematic arrangement, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 4 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and severely limited. Frequent word-choice and word-formation errors—such as 'being a rich' instead of 'wealth' or 'being rich', 'vey crusious', 'thier need thar', and 'sweet herted'—place a heavy burden on the reader and occasionally strain comprehension. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and spelling mistakes are pervasive ('conculsin', 'inportant'). These limitations restrict the score to Band 4, as the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, frequently causing strain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying primarily on simple sentence structures that are frequently marred by foundational errors. The response contains pervasive errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and clause structure, such as in the sentences 'Some people has faith that which people has vey big amount...' and 'should them that they will do other poor people'. Complex sentences are attempted but consistently faulty, leading to frequent errors that impede comprehension and obscure the intended meaning. This level of grammatical control corresponds to a Band 4.
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