Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few individuals believe that for become rich person the main thing is that they have chance to help someone. I strongly believe that helping others create friendly environment and increase positivity in life. I will discuss more about advantages of helping someone in upcoming paragraph.
On the one hand, When a person start helping someone in every moment of life they have good social attitude and help to make friendly vibe with others. Having a chance to help someone is the greatest thing in human life. When we help someone we get so many blessings from them and it enhance our confidence in way of success. It also improve quality of life who being helped by someone like they also feel that they are not alone they had someone who cares for them. While for being rich person require a lot of good habit and helping is one of the most important to have. It also shows kindness toward others. for example, blind people need somone's help to cross the road and decrease chance of accident, when someone help them to cross the road the blind person feel good for them who helped.
On the other hand, When a person not have to help others even they have chance it shows them as a rude and selfish. nowadays, For the many big companies when they hiring a person they look for kindness and helping nature to create good environment in their work place. If a person have helping nature they had more chance to get good career opportunity.
In conclusion, I largely agree with the statement that helping someone is the important thing to become rich both as social and personal life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt regarding whether the most important thing about being rich is helping others, and a clear position is established. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion focuses heavily on the general benefits of kindness rather than deeply exploring the direct relationship between wealth and philanthropy, or evaluating the statement against other potential priorities of wealth. Examples provided, such as helping blind people cross the road, are simplistic and lack broader analytical depth. While the task is addressed, the ideas are under-developed in places, placing this response firmly in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs with a basic introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is disrupted by repetitive phrasing and weak cohesive ties. Transitional phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used mechanically, but the logical links between sentences are often strained or confusing, such as 'While for being rich person require a lot of good habit and helping is one of the most important to have.' Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult to track whether the pronouns refer to the rich person or the person being helped. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires improvement. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on general terms like 'thing', 'good', and 'help'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word formations, such as 'for become rich person', 'enhance our confidence in way of success', and 'helping nature'. While the meaning is generally communicated, the lack of control over word formation and collocation restricts the lexical range to a minimally adequate level for the task. Vocabulary usage reflects the Band 5.0 descriptor profile, where errors cause some difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, including missing articles ('for become rich person'), subject-verb agreement issues ('When a person not have', 'If a person have'), and incorrect prepositions or verb forms ('who being helped'). Punctuation is also erratic. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and demonstrate weak control over sentence structures, corresponding to a Band 4.5 or 5.0 level. Awarding 5.0 gives credit for the occasional correctly structured simple sentences.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.