Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued by some people that most essential part of having rich lifestyle is that person has chances to assist others. I strondly agree with this statement as when an individual have huge amount of money then he has many ways to meet the needs of people such as by giving money, buying necessary home appliances, paying educational fees and paying for health care facilities.

Firstly, the major significance of being a wealthy is that person is able give money to poor and needy people who do not express their needs to other people and its best way to spend your resources on them. Secondly, modern electronic gadgets are the necessary components required in every homes and most of the poor people do not have enough income to buy these. For example, refrigerators and fan coolers are crucial to deal and survive 49 degree celcius temperature in Pakistan and also these electronics are very expensive that average lower class person can not afford them. Therefore, upper class individuals have very good opportunity to brought these to poors.

Moreover, due to high dues of educational institutions, many students could not have any support to deposit such huge a amount so they discontinue there studies. The elite person can give support to such learners by paying there fees directly to university or giving funds to high achievers. Furthurmore, in developing countries, public health care system is very worst and private hospitals are soo expensive that average person can not afford there treatment. For instance, in india, 40% of deaths happened due to lack of treatment in public sector hospitals. Hence, strong opportunity is also available to pay for medicine.

In conclusion, as being rich is consider as bounty for a person that one has find prospects to help others not only in terms of giving price money, buying essential appliances but also in supporting poor students and paying hospital charges.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt directly, presenting a clear position that the most important aspect of being rich is the opportunity to help others. The writer develops this position throughout the essay with specific examples, such as providing refrigerators and fans for extreme heat in Pakistan, paying university fees, and covering medical expenses in India. While some of the supporting points could be elaborated with greater depth or more precise framing, the ideas are relevant, appropriately extended, and cover all parts of the task well, fulfilling the criteria for a Band 6.5 or solid 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is structured with an introduction, three distinct body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' are employed to guide the reader through the text, though their use is at times slightly mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, but occasional minor logical gaps in transitions exist. Overall arrangement is coherent, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'electronic gadgets', 'public health care system', and 'prospects'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'have huge amount of money', 'price money' instead of 'prize money', 'bring these to poors', and 'worst' instead of 'worse'. Spelling and morphological issues like 'strondly' and 'Furthurmore' occur, but communication is not impeded, placing this response firmly in Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating conditional or relative ideas such as 'who do not express their needs to other people'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors involving subject-verb agreement and articles, such as 'an individual have', 'being a wealthy', 'average lower class person can not afford them', and 'paying there fees'. Punctuation is mostly standard, but sentence structures can become unwieldy. The frequency and persistence of these errors place this criterion at Band 5.0.

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