Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Mostly people believe that being rich is the important thing that has opportunity to assist others.I would like to agree with that because it can result helping poors and unemployed people to earn money.It totally depends on the person who is rich and if he want to assist people or not.

In my opinion rich persons has the biggest opportunity to invest on others.He can get benefits from people through appointing them tasks and people can get the source of income.For instance , if there is an unemployed person and he is looking for a job , a rich person can guide him or hire him to do work . It will be a perfect assistance for the person by rich man.In addition it depends on rich man if he is willing to help or not.

Moveover, rich man can help poors in the form of gifts that they can use in their daily life For example , gifting a bike who can not afford , that help alot in their daily life use and helping to poor's children in study expense. These assitance are the perfect for the willing rich man. in my opinion every rich man must help especially poors and unemployed people.Helping others is also a very good deed.

Ultimately, being rich unlocks alot of opportuniteies but helping others is the best opportunity you help different people like poors and unemployed in return they can give a benefit in rich person's work and it results increasing respect in society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the most important thing about being rich is the opportunity to help others, and the writer takes a clear agreeing position. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying on basic examples like hiring an unemployed person, giving a bike, or assisting with study expenses. While the main stance is maintained, the arguments lack depth and sophisticated elaboration, which places this response comfortably at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing some structural organization, although progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of clear logical flow. Cohesive devices are minimal, sometimes inaccurate, or overused, such as repeating 'In addition' and 'in my opinion' multiple times without adding sophisticated transitions. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and sentences often feel disconnected, resulting in an overall mechanical progression characteristic of Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and basic, with frequent lexical and word-form inaccuracies such as 'assit' instead of assistance, 'poors' instead of poor people, and 'opportuniteies'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'unemployed' and 'opportunity', but the lack of precision and spelling issues cause noticeable difficulty for the reader at times. This reflects the characteristics of a Band 5.0 performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex forms are frequently faulty, such as in the sentence 'Mostly people believe that being rich is the important thing that has opportunity to assist others.' There are persistent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('a bike who can not afford'), incorrect verb forms ('he want to assist'), and punctuation issues. However, meaning is mostly conveyed despite these frequent errors, aligning with Band 5.0.

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