Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I think this is a very good discussion about the rich people. Because the rich people is very important in our life.They help them to the poor people in their life.The rich people organized them some charity progrm.

The charity program was organized them for the childern,old people and the poor people.The rich people in our family is very important.Because they will help in many stages in our life.Rich people was a very kind and soft man.

I think it is the ground reality of the rich people.Some people in their life very hard work then they became a rich man.Rich people see up and down many stages in our life.But they constant on their work.

The rich people gave many opportunities to the poor people.Because they will help them in our life.The rich people gave many scholorships to the universities. Whose students are colify about the scholorship criteria.

The rich peoples gain many stages and opportunities for the poor people.Because they will very kind people.

I think I will agreey about all of these statements.Because the rich people also help them to the poor people.In all over the stages in our life.The rich have many money in our accounts.They help the poor people gave some money.They account cannot be damaged.The rich people strongest in their life.They hep them the many peoples.This is the reason of the rich people is more rich in our life.

I think I agree about the rich comunity because they will helps them the other people in their life.It is a very good think about the rich people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether the most important thing about being rich is having the opportunity to help others. The writer expresses a clear position of agreement, mentioning examples such as charity programs, scholarships, and financial assistance to the poor. However, the development of ideas is extremely limited and repetitive. Many sentences restate the same point—that rich people give money to help the poor—without offering deeper analysis, logical extension, or fully supported arguments. The response is heavily generalized and lacks the depth expected for an academic essay. As a result, it falls into Band 4, as the ideas are minimally developed and the task is only partially addressed with repetitive concepts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression and overall coherence. The text is broken into short, fragmented paragraphs with abrupt transitions and weak connections between ideas. For instance, jumping from 'charity program' to 'The rich people in our family is very important' disrupts the flow of argument. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying heavily on repetitive referencing such as 'Because they will help them in our life.' Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack a clear central topic sentence and coherent internal structure. Information and ideas are not arranged in a way that allows for smooth reading, matching the descriptors for Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently recycles simple words and phrases such as 'rich people,' 'help,' 'poor people,' and 'many.' There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'colify about the scholorship criteria' (qualify for the scholarship criteria) and 'ground reality.' The range of vocabulary is inadequate for discussing abstract social concepts, and spelling and morphological errors (e.g., 'scholerhip', 'agreey', 'comunity') are frequent. However, the meaning can generally be extracted despite the strain caused by limited lexis, aligning the response with Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the response demonstrates a very limited range of structures. The sentences are predominantly simple or faulty attempts at complex structures, often marred by severe grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The rich people is', 'The rich peoples'), incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'Rich people was a very kind'), and redundant pronouns (e.g., 'The charity program was organized them for'). Punctuation is basic and erratic, with frequent sentence fragments and run-on structures. Because errors are extremely frequent and occasionally obscure the exact meaning of the sentences, the performance matches the Band 4 descriptors.

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