Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Currently, in this world there are many people who are far rich then many individuals thinks. They are rich because of there smart mindset and dedication towards their business. I don't feel any hesitation to say that poor people will be more poor in their future because they doesn't have that type of mindset and dedication like rich individuals. This may be because they are not well educate or they have poor financial background. But some poor people who has poor financial background also become rich nowadays because they focus on their weekness. Nowadays, rich people are in the way to help poor people because they have too much money so, they are feeding poor's to rise the humanity. In this generation rich people have a golden opportunity to help poor people because if they help poor people and make a video of helping them and post it in social media then it goes viral easily and that is good for both of them. Some people do this kinds of acivities to get viral and some do it from their heart because they are kind hearted. For example, a teacher from india who is famous for his outstanding teaching and his name is Khan Sir, he recently opened a cancer hospital where he gives treatment to patient in very very low price like [redacted phone]rs. This is very good for this world because many people who can't have that much money to get a better treatment for their disease then they can easily afford this fee. Therefore, some rich people have to get inspire from him and they have to established some schools,colleges,hospitals where they can provide high quality facilities for free for poor people.

But in this current period of time people who are too rich they doesn't want to hep others because they think that if they help some poor people today they think they can be more rich then them in future. But from my prespective people doesn't have to think bad about others or they doesn't have to get jealous from others because everything thing we have we got all it from god and if we die we are not taking it in hell or heaven. They have to maintain a positive thinking for poor people also. Hence, if a person treats every people equally and do well behave with everybody then he is rich. People have to be rich from heart not from money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by discussing whether helping others is the most important part of being rich, presenting a position that acknowledges both altruistic acts and selfish attitudes. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and relies on sweeping generalisations, such as claiming poor people lack dedication due to mindset or education. The example of Khan Sir is relevant and adds specific context, yet the overall argumentation lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. The writer does attempt to explore multiple angles, including social media validation and moral obligations, but the reasoning is occasionally simplistic and digresses into moralising. Overall, the response meets the criteria for Band 5.5 to 6.0, as it addresses all parts of the prompt with relevant ideas, though some parts are under-developed or unclear.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with basic paragraphing that separates the main arguments from the counter-arguments. However, cohesion is frequently mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on transitional phrases like 'Nowadays', 'Therefore', and 'Hence'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronouns where the antecedent is ambiguous (e.g., 'they doesn't want to hep others because they think that if they help some poor people today they think...'). Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical progression within paragraphs is disrupted by run-on sentences and sudden shifts in focus. These limitations place the response firmly in the Band 5.0 to 5.5 range, with Band 5.0 best capturing the repetitive referencing and mechanical cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully communicating everyday ideas and attempting less common items such as 'altruistic', 'philanthropy', or specific contextual terms like 'cancer hospital'. However, there are frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as writing 'far rich then many individuals thinks', 'poor's', 'weekness', and 'do well behave'. Spelling errors like 'educate' instead of 'educated', 'acivities', 'prespective', and 'established' occur throughout the text. While these lexical inaccuracies do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This performance corresponds to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are persistent subject-verb agreement errors ('poor people... doesn't have', 'people who are too rich they doesn't want'), incorrect verb forms ('has poor financial background also become'), and faulty comparative structures ('more poor'). Punctuation is also problematic, marked by run-on sentences and comma splices, such as in 'This may be because they are not well educate or they have poor financial background. But some poor people...'. Because frequent grammatical errors cause some difficulty for the reader and accurate complex structures are rare, the response earns a Band 5.0.

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