Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some people believe that the most important thing of being wealthy is having the great opportunities to others. i prtly agree with this point of view because wealth can help people to support which they need.
on the one hand, wealthy people are also in a strong position and they improve their lifesyle to others. they can donate money for charity, support poor families and contribute some different projects such as, education,healthcare. for instance, a wealhy person can provide a scholorships for students or help to build a school in a underdeveloped area. such actions may have a long-term position in a society. moreover, helping others
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 106 words. Consequently, the ideas are severely underdeveloped and incomplete, with the text trailing off at the end ("moreover, helping others"). While the writer attempts to address the prompt by stating a partial agreement regarding the role of wealth in helping others, the arguments are cut short and lack sufficient support. The incomplete nature of the response restricts it to a Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text shows some basic attempts at logical progression and paragraphing, such as using transitional phrases like "on the one hand" and "for instance". However, because the text is severely truncated and incomplete, overall coherence and paragraph structure are significantly disrupted. Referencing and cohesive devices are minimally applied. Due to the unfinished nature of the writing and the lack of a complete organizational structure, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word formation and collocation, such as "the most important thing of being wealthy" instead of "about being wealthy", and "scholorships" (spelling error). The writer attempts some less common terms like "underdeveloped area" and "contribute some different projects", but overall lexical control is limited. Based on these limitations and the short length, the vocabulary falls into the Band 5.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writer demonstrates control over simple sentence structures, but attempts at complex sentences show errors, such as "having the great opportunities to others" and missing articles or incorrect preposition use (e.g., "donate money for charity"). Furthermore, there are basic punctuation and capitalization issues, such as the lowercase "i" in "i prtly agree". Given the limited range of grammatical structures and frequent errors relative to the short output, a Band 4.5 is warranted.
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