Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. This essay agrees with this statement and the essay will first discuss the potential positive impact along with supporting arguments, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

To begin with, there are numerous reasons why we should believing to help the other people because that was the first and most important opportunity to help the poor people. Moreover, the most notable one thing, most of the richest people are give donation to some NGOS and give charities to those people who are really needed for that. For example, Nita Ambani, in every year gives donation to all the girls and womens. Among them, she invited her house, give some food and fruits and after that she gives some amount of money on their hands.

Additionally, some people ahve so much attitude that they became rich person but they have not any sameless things that they don't give respect to the other people even their own parents also. Furthermore, Some people are already have a silver spoon when they were born, however, some are being a richest person by their hardwork and get success. In addition, that's why those people knows about the value of the poor people who have not atlist one time of meal at their homes.

To conclude, I agree with the statement that we should help to other people who's were necessary and it's such great things and also we feel so blessed that we done some good works for the other people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that wealth's most important aspect is helping others, yet the ideas remain limited and under-developed. While the introduction outlines the essay structure, the body paragraphs present superficial arguments and repetitive points regarding donations without deep elaboration. For instance, the example of Nita Ambani is introduced abruptly and lacks clear connection to the central thesis regarding societal wealth. To move beyond this level, the writer needs to fully develop ideas with robust explanations and well-contextualized examples rather than relying on brief, disconnected assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic organization with discernible introduction, body, and concluding paragraphs, and the essay employs standard transitional markers such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'To conclude'. However, the overall progression lacks clarity, and the sequence of ideas feels disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the topic shifts abruptly to attitudes and family backgrounds. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or repetitive, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as pronoun use in 'those people who are really needed for that'. Improving cohesion requires smoother transitions between sentences and clearer links between supporting details and main ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic meaning. The writer attempts less common expressions like 'potential positive impact', 'silver spoon', and 'hardwork', but these are accompanied by noticeable word-choice errors, incorrect word forms, and awkward phrasing such as 'give donation', 'give charities', and 'sameless things'. Spelling and collocation inaccuracies occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire and use words with greater precision, avoiding literal translations and incorrect grammatical forms of words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text, such as 'we should believing', 'most of the richest people are give', 'some people ahve so much attitude', and 'people are already have'. Punctuation is also weak in places, leading to run-on sentences. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control over grammatical patterns. A higher score requires mastering basic sentence construction and increasing the proportion of error-free complex sentences.

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