Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Being affluent has become a pervasive phenomena in the cotemporary epoch, and a growing number of individuals have embarked upon it, and numerous are striving. And i completely concur with the view that wealthy individuals have the oppourtunity to create huge impact in society by facilitating other individuals.
At the outset, I believe that helping other confers a plethora of substancial benefits for other human being and for a society as whole. Abundant wealth engedgers lucrative oppurtunities for rich people to fund in social welfare & environmental events. Moreover, facilitating underprivilidge individuals. Additionally, there can be many other ways of funding for instance: an affluent individual can invest in the startups, promoting enterprenuial projects by helping small businesses to grow.
Meanwhile that actions not only tends low income individuals to survive, it can be attributed to improving their quality of life, and augments ease in having basic necessities easily, which is privilidge for them. Ultimately it will have a positive impact in the society, largely driven by fundings or investments. Result in sustancial increase in the economic factor of country. As there is contrary belief that, if you invest money in helping others, it will definitely gets double. Hence facilitating vulnerable population of community will not reduce your wealth. However, it can brings more peace in heart and the individual feel more prosperous.
In conclusion, aggluent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt partially and takes a clear position by agreeing with the statement, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer mentions funding social welfare and environmental events or investing in startups, but these points are stated briefly without sufficient explanation or specific examples. Furthermore, the response suffers from a critical length issue, as it contains only 226 words, thus failing to meet the required 250-word minimum for Task 2. This lack of development and incomplete length prevent the response from achieving a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response shows some organization, such as attempting an introductory paragraph and body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'Meanwhile that actions' and repetitive phrasing throughout the text. Paragraphing is also problematic, as the essay breaks down completely at the end with an incomplete concluding fragment ('In conclusion, aggluent...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, making the logical connection between sentences difficult to follow at times.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, such as 'affluent', 'pervasive', and 'plethora', but these are marred by noticeable spelling, word-form, and word-choice errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'phenomena' instead of 'phenomenon', 'cotemporary epoch', 'engedgers' instead of 'engenders', 'underprivilidge', 'enterprenuial', and 'aggluent'. These recurring lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to this band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer uses a limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentence forms are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including problems with subject-verb agreement ('a growing number of individuals... and numerous are striving'), missing articles ('as whole', 'in society'), incorrect verb forms ('that actions not only tends low income individuals to survive'), and awkward prepositional use. Punctuation errors, such as sentence fragments starting with 'And i' and 'Moreover, facilitating underprivilidge individuals', also persist throughout the text.
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