Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people believe that being rich has many privileges but most important one is that they have the opportunity to help others. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement because it is not compulsory as well as morally wrong.

To begin with, although rich people are financially rich and born with all the things one could wish. The riches they have are not born out of thin air, they have earned that money to get where they are today. So, they do not feel any compulsion to help anyone and why should they ? For example if you are a middle-class man, when you sees a beggar would you gave them money ? I think not because that is human nature.

Furthermore, it is morally wrong and humiliating to expect some one to come and help them because in today's world everyone cares about themselves and expecting help is no different than begging. Rich people do not care about other peoples because they know that helping them would do them no good. Even if they provide an opportunity to poor people they would appreciate it at first than demand more as that is human nature. Therefor rich people tends to avoid those people and refrain from providing any help.

In conclusion, my opinion is that although rich people have opportunity to help others they do not as they are not willing or pressured to help. Also it is morally wrong and humans are inherently greed people that is why they do not help.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that helping others is the most important aspect of being rich, and you give two reasons—help is not compulsory and expecting it may be humiliating. These points are relevant, but the response only partly develops the question. It focuses mainly on whether wealthy people choose to help, rather than explaining what else might be most important about being rich or weighing the value of helping against other benefits. Claims such as “everyone cares about themselves” and that recipients will “demand more” are broad and need explanation or a more convincing example. To strengthen the response, clarify the exact extent of your disagreement and develop each reason with specific, balanced support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “Furthermore,” and a conclusion. This makes the main line of argument easy to identify. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first moves from how wealth is earned to whether a middle-class person would give money, without fully connecting that example to the claim about wealthy people. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “those people” and “them” do not always make clear who is meant. The conclusion repeats the main claims rather than drawing them together. Use clearer links between each reason and the position, and organise each paragraph around one developed point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your general argument, including “privileges,” “compulsion,” “humiliating,” and “opportunity.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning less precise. For example, “financially rich” is repetitive, “helping them would do them no good” is vague, and “humans are inherently greed people” uses the wrong form of the word. Spelling errors such as “Therefor” and “some one” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise expressions and check collocations and word forms; for instance, distinguish between being willing to help and being obliged to help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a concession beginning “although” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. The opening body sentence is a fragment: “although rich people are financially rich and born with all the things one could wish.” There are also recurring errors in verb forms and agreement, as in “when you sees” and “rich people tends,” as well as “would you gave” instead of a correctly formed question. Punctuation around questions and clauses is inconsistent. These errors can make the reader pause, even though the overall argument remains understandable. Practise complete clause structures and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when editing.

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