Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Being rich has varying caveats to it, as few people would like to believe that being rich comes with an opportunity and responsibility help others, while others may believe that it makes one self-centered. Therefore, I believe that money is not the only mean through which one can extend their support and help but there are many other ways through which it can be done.

Being rich expands your capability and means to help others, as mostly people suffer due to lack of funds, and if one has it in abudance, they can extend this support. Many poor people are unable to send their children to schools, and most importantly they lack the basic neccsities including, food, water, shelter, clothes. Thus, rich people may offer them the money or purchase for them the right amount of goods that they require to live a life with atleast basic of necessities. As in Pakistan, the poverty rate is extremely high due to high unemployment and many poor families are on streets. Therefore, the people with abundance money start their NGOs and programs to support the needy ones by providing them with the financial support,

Nevertheless, helping others is associated with the kind of person you are. If the person carries sympathy and empathy they might find all the opportunities they can to help people in need. Mostly, people need emotional support more than financial ones, so that can only be possible if you carry emotions and feel for the other person.

Moreover, rich people usually end up spending on themselves rather than thinking about others who require their support. They become extremely self centered and selfish in their approach and daily lives due to the pride and arrogance of being rich that takes their opportunity for helping others away from them. As in in elitist and capatlist societies, only rich people are given priority sidelining the needy ones and those in need of help.

I believe that being rich may provide you the means to help others, but it is very important for you to be sympethatic towards others so that you can extend this help. Therefore, I think a good and a kind hearted person has better opportunites to help others as they are able to provide emotional help and will always find the means to cater to people around them in need.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: wealth can provide practical means to help, but kindness and empathy matter more than money alone. You address both sides with relevant examples, including support for children’s education and basic needs, and the discussion of emotional support. The conclusion restates your view consistently. This meets the task well, while some ideas are more fully developed than others: the Pakistan example mentions NGOs and unemployment but does not explain how a particular form of assistance helps, and the claim that rich people become selfish is broad and would benefit from qualification or evidence. To strengthen the response further, explain the significance of each example and connect it explicitly to whether helping others is the most important aspect of being rich.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on financial and emotional help, a counterpoint about selfishness, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Nevertheless,” “Moreover,” and “Therefore” help signal shifts in the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose, and some connections feel mechanical. For example, “As in Pakistan” introduces an example without clearly linking it to the preceding point, while the final paragraph repeats the contrast between wealth and kindness rather than drawing the strands together. The reference in “they can extend this support” is also somewhat vague. Use clearer topic sentences, make each example directly support its paragraph’s main claim, and vary transitions so the argument develops more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “financial support,” “emotional support,” “poverty rate,” and “unemployment,” which allows you to discuss both material and personal assistance. There are also attempts at more formal or topic-specific language, such as “elitist” and “sympathy.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less precise: “varying caveats,” “abudance money,” “basic of necessities,” and “capatlist societies” are examples. Repetition of “help,” “support,” and “rich” also limits flexibility. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully; more precise alternatives will make your argument clearer without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If the person carries sympathy and empathy…” and clauses explaining causes and consequences. Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, the opening sentence has an incomplete pattern in “responsibility help others,” and “money is not the only mean through which one can extend their support and help” contains an awkwardly constructed clause. There are also issues with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the basic neccsities including” and the comma at the end of the NGO sentence. Practise checking each sentence for a complete grammatical structure, then review articles, singular/plural forms, and punctuation.

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