Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, financial stability is the most important thing for humans life. wealthy individuals are able to help poor peoples to fullfill their needs, i completely agree with that.

One main reason is that wealthy indidviduals are able to spent more money on their daily routine or diet soo when they spent much on their own self and when they spend alot on themselve and by that they have seen some road side peoples their mind get stuck and they try to help the poor individuals whereas the middle class always think to help poor people but they are not able to anything for anyone because of their financial system in contrast rich peoples have an opportunity to help people who are needy and not stable.

On the second hand there are many peoples who sometime need money because of some loss or having unemployment, when they go to the middle class person the middle class person will firstly check their own needs and then think about that whereas when the needy person go to the wealthy indiviuals they are always have that much money to help people so they dont even think about that can i give money to needy person or not, thats the difference even in thinking of both mindsets.

In conclusion, the wealthy have more facilities to help people who are needy they are able to help the indiviuals who need things and they are not even able to ask anthing, so the wealthy people have an oppur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear in the opening: you completely agree that wealth creates an opportunity to help others. The two body paragraphs also stay relevant, discussing support for people in need and those facing unemployment or loss. However, the response only partially develops the task: it focuses on how rich people can help, without explaining whether this is the most important aspect of being rich or considering other possible benefits. Several claims, such as middle-class people being unable to help, are broad and need qualification or a specific example. The conclusion is unfinished, so it does not fully bring your argument together. Develop the central comparison and support each reason more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding section, and the reader can follow the general argument. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: the first body paragraph repeats the idea of spending on oneself and helping others, while the second moves through several points in one long sentence. Linking phrases such as “On the second hand” and “whereas” are used mechanically or awkwardly, and some references, including “that” and “they,” are not always clear. The conclusion begins to summarise the position but ends abruptly. Give each paragraph one main point, order its explanation and example clearly, and use linking expressions only where they show a genuine relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “wealthy individuals,” “financial stability,” “unemployment” and “needy,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and repetitive, especially the repeated use of “people,” “help” and “money.” Several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear or natural, such as “fullfill,” “indidviduals,” “oppurtunity” and “road side peoples.” Some phrases are also poorly collocated, including “financial system” where you appear to mean a person’s financial circumstances. Build a more precise range for discussing charitable support and economic hardship, and check spelling and common word combinations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and these attempts are often faulty. For example, “when they go to the middle class person the middle class person will firstly check their own needs and then think about that” lacks clear sentence boundaries and has an unclear final clause. There are frequent problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “wealthy individuals are able to spent” and “they are always have.” Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate subordinate clauses and punctuation.

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