Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary era, some individual vocalise the most precise thing about being wealthy is that one has the moment to help needy persons. I largely agree with this point, if someone has an enough flow of money and they don't have any concern to donate few penny of their saving to others in term of help them.

To begin with, many general groups has a need of money but few of them for instance, many old peoples don't have enough strength to work in their age as they prefer to become a beggar in rural areas as well as in urban areas it is more significant that people ask by themselves to others.

Moving towards to the rest of the information, there are many individuals those are very rich and live their desire life in my opinion these people has a great opportunity to help others as any expect that they want moreover, it is their opinions because its their hardworking that pays off after a certain time there are many ways to help peoples For example, over the internet there's some apps and website to donate the society it's shows their mankind and many individuals will fell good as a result and pauper will give them blessings for their future and in my country many peoples thinks if they donate single penny from their money they will safe from the eye of evil.

In conclusion, it is a great chance to show peoples their heart as to help others on their bad times. Moreover there are many old peoples who's abandoned by their children's as a result they go to old age home and many wealthy peoples donate their money to take blessings from them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is stated in the introduction: you largely agree that wealth matters because it gives people the chance to help others. The examples of donating through websites and supporting older people are relevant to this view. However, the response addresses the question only partially because it does not explain why helping others is the most important aspect of being rich, or consider other possible benefits of wealth. Several points are asserted rather than developed—for example, the claim that donations bring blessings is not connected clearly to the central argument. To strengthen the response, explain the importance of helping others and support each main point with a clear reason or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the essay. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph introduces older people, while the next shifts among wealthy people’s lifestyles, online donations, personal satisfaction and beliefs about evil without clear links. Some sentences contain several ideas joined together, making relationships between points unclear. Cohesive expressions such as “Moreover” are repeated but do not always show how the next idea follows. Give each paragraph one central purpose, order its supporting points logically, and use shorter sentences and clearer references to connect them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “wealthy,” “donate,” “old age home” and “opportunity,” and you try to express ideas about generosity and need. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to interpret, such as “the most precise thing,” “an enough flow of money” and “show peoples their heart.” There are also noticeable word-form and spelling problems, including “vocalise,” “mankind” where “humanity” is intended, and “pauper.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than using unusual wording: for example, say “the most important aspect,” “sufficient income,” and “show compassion.” Check spelling and whether each word fits its context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional wording such as “if someone has…” and clauses introduced by “as” and “because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “some individual vocalise,” “many general groups has,” and “these people has,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent; for instance, “donate few penny” and the long sentence beginning “Moving towards to the rest of the information” needs clearer punctuation and structure. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine related ideas using one well-controlled subordinate clause.

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