Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no denying the fact that the money its important to have a good life and good health - in ideal form- , because the money now its consider as a power and key card to get everything you want it . But does that mean that you have to be rich to get an opportunity to help other people? or helping hand just is limited to rich people ?.

To begin with this idea let's talk about what helping another people really mean. Helping hand doesn't mean just to The poor and the needy people , its also mean for any person who really need it , like , money , resident place or food for one who temporary need it for any reason .In addition,it doesn't limited to humen , it's also for animal and plant .

Differences of opinion may arise,just having a lot of money make me suitable for helping, or you can help despite your fianincal condition .

Another point to consider, its how much money do you have doesn't not mean it suitable for you to give a help or not , there is no cut point to let you give a help.

So it's not necessry to put your self underpressure just to give a help , you can just give what you are really capable to afford it , and it's very enough.

It is also possible to say that if you can't give a help from your own , you can just tell about it to other , or you can use so many tools to spread it , for instance , wallpepar , magazine

and for now there is social media , make you c

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You engage with the central issue by questioning whether helping others is exclusive to wealthy people, and you offer relevant examples such as giving food or temporary accommodation, supporting animals and plants, and sharing information through social media. However, the response only partially answers “to what extent” you agree: your position is implied rather than stated clearly, and the discussion does not directly weigh the opportunity to help against other benefits of being rich. Several points, including the claim that there is “no cut point” for giving, are introduced but not explained or supported. State your degree of agreement in the introduction and conclusion, then develop two or three reasons with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the opening raises the question, and later paragraphs introduce different aspects of helping, including who can be helped and how people can contribute. Linking phrases such as “To begin with,” “Another point to consider,” and “It is also possible to say” help signal new points. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because ideas are not grouped into a clear argument, and some transitions do not show how one point relates to the next. The final idea about spreading information is left unfinished, which weakens the ending. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a conclusion that restates your position; make each paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “the poor and the needy,” “financial condition,” “opportunity,” and “social media.” These choices show an effort to discuss both direct assistance and ways of raising awareness. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “fianincal,” “wallpepar,” and “give a help”; phrases such as “resident place” and “cut point” are also unclear or unnatural in context. Build a bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. Prefer natural expressions such as “provide assistance,” “financial circumstances,” and “a threshold for giving.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both questions and longer sentences, for example, “But does that mean that you have to be rich to get an opportunity to help other people?” This shows some willingness to vary sentence forms. However, the range is limited, and attempts at complex structures are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in “the money now its consider as a power” and “how much money do you have doesn't not mean it suitable for you.” Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Helping hand doesn't mean just to The poor.” These problems can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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