Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the current age. wealth play a vital role to spend their lifes according to royal family. Many individuals aurge that the most significiant thing about being a rich to creats many chances to assist the other people. Although in this countries where most popullation are rich have a great economy, and smaller type of poor people. I strongly agree this statement being a wealthy to help the poor

To sum up, rich men have a least type of diseases, because a wealthy person eat proper diet and take best treatment. Therefore, I am completly agree this opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

Your response gives a clear general position: “I strongly agree” that wealth can help people, and the final sentence also signals agreement. However, the task asks you to explain the extent of your agreement, and the reasons are not sufficiently developed. The opening mentions rich countries and poverty, while the conclusion introduces better diets and medical treatment; neither point is explained with a specific example or a clear link to how being rich enables someone to help others. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, so there is too little relevant support to address the task adequately. Develop two focused reasons and explain each with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening states your view, and “To sum up” introduces a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of beginning and ending. However, the response has no developed body paragraphs, and the ideas move abruptly from wealth and helping others to rich countries, then to personal health. The relationship between these points is unclear, so progression is limited. The opening also contains an incomplete or confusing sentence beginning “Although in this countries,” which interrupts the flow. Use separate paragraphs for your position and supporting reasons, and connect each idea explicitly—for example, explain how financial resources allow people to donate or support community services.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “wealth,” “significant,” “assist,” “economy,” and “treatment,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to make several phrases difficult to understand, such as “a urge,” “significiant,” “popullation,” and “a least type of diseases.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “being a rich” and “smaller type of poor people.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than more complicated wording: for instance, use “wealthy people,” “help those in need,” and “a lower proportion of people living in poverty.” Proofread spelling and check unfamiliar words before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make a few attempts to combine ideas, including the sentence beginning “Although” and the use of “because” and “Therefore.” However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in basic forms and sentence construction often make the meaning unclear. Examples include “wealth play” instead of a correctly formed subject–verb combination, “to creats,” and “I am completly agree,” where the verb pattern is incorrect. The sentence “Although in this countries where most popullation are rich…” is also incomplete and has problems with articles and agreement. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after infinitives, and the structure “I completely agree.”

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