Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some people argue that the main advantage being wealthy is the chance to support other.I completely agree with this view rich people improve society and help needy people in way poor people cannot

firstly rich people have enough money to help society on the large scale .for example,they can build hospitals,school,and for poor people.A normal person can only help one or two man people,but a rich person can help thousand of poor people helps money.Therefore wealth gives a great opportunity to make a positive chances in world.

secondly,being rich allow the people to help not only strangers but also their family and friend.A wealthy person support his parents,give good education of childrens,and provide to jobs other.Thid help to kind bring happiness and respects.On the other hand a poor person cannot helps other even if he wants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I completely agree”—and give two relevant reasons: wealthy people can support society on a large scale and assist family and friends. However, the response addresses the task only partially because these points are asserted rather than explained with specific, developed examples. The claim that a rich person can help “thousand of poor people” is not clarified, and the family-support point ends without showing why this is the most important benefit of wealth. The response also does not consider whether helping others is more important than other advantages of being rich. The required minimum length is not met, which leaves the argument substantially incomplete. Develop each reason and connect it directly to the question’s emphasis on “the most important thing.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “firstly” and “secondly,” and a progression from helping society to helping relatives. These features make the main line of thought reasonably easy to follow. However, the development within paragraphs is abrupt, and the final sentence beginning “On the other hand” introduces a contrast that is not fully explained or linked back to the argument. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “Therefore wealth gives a great opportunity to make a positive chances in world.” Use complete, logically connected explanations after each example, and make the relationship between ideas explicit. A brief conclusion would also help the response feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “wealthy,” “support,” “society,” “education,” and “opportunity,” and the reader can generally identify your intended ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “help thousand of poor people helps money” does not clearly express how wealth enables assistance, while “make a positive chances” uses an unsuitable combination. There are also spelling and word-form problems such as “Thid” and “childrens.” Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing charitable support and social impact, and check that nouns, verbs, and modifiers fit together naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason-and-result structure with “Therefore,” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “being rich allow the people,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “A wealthy person support his parents,” which also needs a correctly formed verb. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are often missing or inconsistent, as in “build hospitals,school” and the opening sentence, which runs into “I completely agree.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence punctuation, then add controlled complex sentences using clauses such as “because” and “which.”

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