Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the proportion of people's coffee and tea persuing and drinking manners in five cities of Australia.

Overall, it can be seen that the parcentage of having tea or coffee in a cafe illustrates the highest place where instant coffe or fresh coffee was in low raw in melbourne city .While Brisbane shows the most lowest percentage in every where.

In Melbourne, persuing coffee and tea accounted for the largest ratio,buying about 64% people while instant coffee and fresh coffee shows 42% and 47%. In Adelaide , buyong a fresh coffee shows the lowest percentages just 34% whereas instant coffee and persuing in a cafe coffee demonstrate the almost same ration 50% and 49%.

in conclusion,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include some relevant comparisons, particularly the café figure for Melbourne and the fresh-coffee and instant-coffee figures for Adelaide. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the overview is unclear, and the claim that Brisbane has the lowest percentage “in every where” is inaccurate, since it does not have the lowest café attendance. Several cities and key patterns are omitted, including Hobart’s high café attendance and instant-coffee figure. The response also ends with “in conclusion,” without a conclusion or further summary, and it is 31 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a clear overview of the main trends, report a broader selection of accurate comparisons, and meet the minimum length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then details about Melbourne and Adelaide. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is limited because only two cities receive detailed coverage, and the final standalone phrase, “in conclusion,” does not complete the response or connect ideas. The overview sentence is difficult to follow, so it does not effectively guide the reader through the comparisons. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and selected details, and connect comparisons with clear expressions such as “by contrast” or “whereas.” Ensure each paragraph develops a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts vocabulary relevant to describing data, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “largest ratio,” and “percentage.” These choices show an effort to use more than very basic language. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to understand: “persuing” appears to mean purchasing, “manners” is unsuitable for habits, and “low raw” does not clearly describe a figure. There are also repeated spelling errors, such as “parcentage,” “coffe,” and “buyong,” alongside awkward phrases like “most lowest.” Build a reliable set of chart-description terms and check spelling and collocations; precise wording will make your comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more developed structures, including the overview beginning “Overall, it can be seen…” and the comparison using “whereas.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to interpret. For example, “the percentage of having tea or coffee in a cafe illustrates the highest place” has an unclear grammatical structure, while “instant coffee and fresh coffee shows” has subject–verb disagreement. The sentence beginning “In Melbourne” also lacks clear grammatical links between its figures. Practise forming direct comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas. Proofreading sentence structure will improve clarity.

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