Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of daily consume drinks such as coffee and tea by the people in Sydney, Melbourne,Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart all cities of Australia.

overall, instant coffee was increase whereas,fresh coffee was decrease in the month over all the cities. moreover, people who went to cafe for coffee and tea were the highest in all the given towns.

To begin with, fresh coffee

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and names all five cities, and its overview attempts to compare the three activities. However, it does not report any usable figures or city-by-city comparisons, and the claim that café visits were highest in every city is inaccurate: in Adelaide, instant coffee purchases (about 50%) slightly exceeded café visits (about 49.5%). The statements that instant coffee “was increase” and fresh coffee “was decrease” are also not supported as trends over time; the chart compares cities, not changes over time. The response is substantially incomplete at 67 words, well below the required 150, and ends after “To begin with, fresh coffee,” without developing the main features. Include an accurate overview and key comparisons with approximate percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview, and “To begin with” signals the start of a detail paragraph. This gives the reader a rudimentary structure. However, the response stops mid-sentence, so there is no completed body paragraph or progression through the chart’s information. The linking words “overall” and “moreover” do not establish clear relationships between the claims, and the overview’s ideas are difficult to follow because they describe changes rather than comparisons among cities. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and selected details, then group related comparisons logically—for example, café attendance and coffee purchases—and complete each point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “bar chart,” “instant coffee,” “fresh coffee,” and “went to cafe,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “daily consume drinks,” “all the given towns,” and “was increase.” “Consume” is also the wrong form in the opening phrase, while “cafe” would be clearer as “café” or “cafés.” The limited range makes it difficult to describe comparisons precisely, and the unfinished final phrase provides no further detail. Build a small set of accurate reporting expressions, such as “the proportion of residents who bought,” “was higher than,” and “recorded the largest share,” and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response shows some control of basic sentence patterns: the opening sentence attempts to introduce the chart, and the overview uses a contrast between instant and fresh coffee. However, grammatical errors are frequent enough to make several statements unclear. For example, “the percentage of daily consume drinks” has an incorrect noun phrase, while “instant coffee was increase” and “fresh coffee was decrease” use incorrect verb forms. The opening also lacks a clear grammatical connection between the city names and “all cities of Australia.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “overall” after a paragraph break and missing spaces after commas. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add more varied structures once the verb forms and sentence boundaries are secure.

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