Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart elucidiates the information about the percentage of the the people buying coffee and tea and drinking habits in five years Australian cities .

Overall,it is clearly shown in the bar chart that thae percentage of coffee ,tea buying in five cities in Australia .There are five cities named Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide,Horbat

first of all i have to talk about Sydney the percentage of people bought fresh coffe in last 4 weeks is 44 percent and the people bought the instant coffee in last 4 weeks is exect 45 percent at the last the people went to cafe to bought the coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is about 63 percent

now look at the poercentage of second city is Melbourne percentage of people who bought the fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is about 40 percent and the instant coffee percentage is about 55 percent people and those people who went to cafe for coffee or tea is about 65 percent

The third one city is Brisbane the percentage of coffee buyer in the city is about 32 percent who buy fresh coffee and 46 percent people who buy instant coffee and about 55 percent people who have go to cafe for buying coffee

now the second last is Adelaide city in this city the percentage of coffee buyer is 32 percent who buy fresh coffee and 53 percent people who buy instant coffee and about 50 percent people to go to buy coffe oe tea

The last one city is Hobart in this city the percentage of coffee is aboiut 38 to bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks and 54 percent people who bought instant coffee and about 67 percent people who went to cafe for coffee or tea in these last 4 weeks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report figures for all five cities and include the three categories, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, it mainly lists city-by-city details rather than summarising the main features. The overview is unclear and does not identify the broad pattern that café visits were generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee purchases were usually the least common. Several figures also differ noticeably from the chart: for example, Melbourne’s instant coffee figure is about 49%, not 55%, and Hobart’s café figure is about 63%, not 67%. The response therefore addresses the task only partially, with limited selection and comparison. Add a clear overview and check key figures against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a recognisable order, moving from Sydney through the other four cities, and phrases such as “first of all,” “now look at,” and “the last one” help signal that sequence. However, this city-by-city listing does not create a clear progression from an overview to grouped comparisons and supporting details. The opening overview is incomplete, and several transitions are repetitive or conversational. Paragraphing is also absent, making the long sequence harder to scan. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and two detail paragraphs that compare related categories or cities. This would make the relationships between the figures clearer and reduce the mechanical feel.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “went to cafe,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being described. However, the range is limited and repetitive, especially in repeated phrases such as “the percentage of people” and “people who bought.” Several word choices and spelling errors reduce clarity, including “elucidiates,” “poercentage,” “Horbat,” and “coffe.” Some expressions are also imprecise for describing survey results, such as “coffee buyer” and “to bought the coffee.” Use more accurate reporting language and vary it with terms such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “visited a café.” Proofreading spelling would also improve readability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its basic meaning through mostly simple sentence patterns, and there are attempts to connect clauses, for example, “the percentage of people who bought the fresh coffee … is about 40 percent.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. The opening, “The given bar chart elucidiates the information about the percentage of the the people,” contains an incomplete or awkward structure and repeated article; later, “people who have go to cafe” has an incorrect verb form. Run-on sentences and missing spaces after commas also make the writing harder to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and divide long statements into complete sentences with consistent punctuation.

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