Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph provides the information regarding peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. In general, there are a few similarties in data.

An anlaysis of the graph indicates that in sydney people bought fresh coffee in last 4 week was 44% than bought instant coffee was 45%but went toa cafe for coffee was over 60% its highest among other.Further, melbourne bought fresh coffee above40%,and 47% instant coffeefollowed by 64% went to a cafe for coffee.

Further examination of the graph shows that 34% of people in brisbane bought fresh coffee,above50%bought instant coffee and 55% went to a cafe.Then adelaide recorded 34% in fresh coffee same as brisbane,and 50% of instant coffee,than 44% gone for a cafe.The hobart city had above 35% people brought fresh coffeein last 4 weeks,54%in instant coffee,and above 60% people went a cafe.

Overall, pattern dispaly more differences than similarties between the people of five Australian cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You cover all five cities and report the three survey categories, with several figures broadly matching the chart—for example, fresh coffee in Sydney is given as 44%, and instant coffee in Hobart as 54%. However, the overview is vague: “a few similarities” and “more differences” do not identify the main pattern that café visits were generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee purchases were usually the least popular. Some figures are inaccurate, notably Melbourne instant coffee (about 48.5%, not 47%) and Adelaide café visits (about 49.5%, not 44%). The response is also five words below the 150-word minimum; the 11 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the count. Develop a clearer overview and check comparisons against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, city-by-city details, and a concluding statement. The sequence from Sydney and Melbourne to Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart makes the information reasonably easy to follow. You also use some linking expressions, such as “Further” and “Overall.” However, the progression is mostly a list of figures rather than a clear comparison of the main patterns, and the final overview repeats a general claim about differences without summarising the key trends. Some links are awkward or unclear, including “than 44% gone for a cafe,” which makes the Adelaide comparison difficult to follow. Grouping cities or categories more deliberately and using accurate comparison links would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “went to a cafe,” so the topic remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly the repeated “bought” and “went to a cafe.” Some word choices and collocations are unnatural, such as “there are a few similarities in data” and “pattern display more differences.” Spelling errors—including “similarties,” “anlaysis,” and “dispaly”—also reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. Aim for precise reporting verbs and natural comparison language, and proofread spelling. For example, “accounted for” or “the proportion who visited” would make the descriptions more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both an introductory sentence and longer sentences that combine figures, showing some effort to vary sentence structure. Nevertheless, many sentences contain grammatical errors, and the longer constructions are often difficult to control. For example, “in sydney people bought fresh coffee in last 4 week was 44% than bought instant coffee was 45%” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “34% of people in brisbane bought fresh coffee, above 50% bought instant coffee” needs clearer sentence boundaries and parallel phrasing. Articles, plural forms, and verb patterns are also inconsistent, as in “went a cafe.” Use complete, simpler comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when you can maintain accurate grammar and punctuation.

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