Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the outcome of a survey realate about people coffee and tea buying and drinking routine in five cities of australia in last 4 weeks.
Oveall, the bar graph show the percentage of coffee and tea buying in austrlia five cities in last four weeks. The coffee have three types fresh coffee, instant coffee and go on cafe for coffeeor tea.
The mostly high percentage in all five cities is go on cafe and drinking coffee or tea. The most percentage of cafe is morethan 60% in last 4 weeks in melbourne and the lowest percentage of fresh coffee is in both Brisbana and Adelaide the high percentage of fresh coffee is 44% in sydney in last 4 weeks.
On the other hand, the instant coffee have equally percentage in all cities and the high percentage in Hobart 54% and low was in sydney 43% as compare to fresh coffee the instant coffee was high retio. The fresh coffee is very low persentage in all cities in last 4 weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify relevant features, including café visits as the leading category overall and fresh coffee as relatively low in Brisbane and Adelaide. You also give some city-specific figures, such as Hobart’s high instant-coffee result and Sydney’s fresh-coffee result. However, the overview is unclear and the comparisons are only partly accurate: café attendance is highest in Melbourne and Hobart, not simply “more than 60% in Melbourne,” while Sydney’s instant-coffee figure is about 45.5%, not 43%. The claim that instant coffee has an “equally percentage” across cities also misses the variation. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the main contrasts and compare the categories consistently across all five cities.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two paragraphs describing the results. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a shift in focus. However, progression is limited because the overview repeats the task description rather than summarising the main patterns, and the final paragraph repeats that fresh coffee is low without adding a clear comparison. Connections between claims are sometimes unclear, particularly in the sentence beginning “The mostly high percentage…” To improve, organise the body around clear comparisons—for example, café visits versus purchases, then fresh versus instant coffee—and use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “survey,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “lowest,” so the reader can identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “the mostly high percentage,” “go on cafe,” “equally percentage,” and “high retio.” Spelling errors such as “austrlia,” “Brisbana,” and “persentage” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of comparison phrases, such as “the highest proportion,” “visited a café,” and “was considerably higher than,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts a few longer structures, including “the lowest percentage of fresh coffee is in both Brisbane and Adelaide.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and can make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “the bar graph show” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the coffee have three types” has an incorrect verb form and unclear sentence structure. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “The most percentage of cafe is morethan 60%.” Work on accurate present-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence patterns. For instance, write “The chart shows three categories” and “Café visits were above 60% in Melbourne and Hobart.”
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