Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart shows the result of a survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. in the sydney bigest number of people bought a fresh coffee. this number is 60% and 44% of people tea. In the Melbourne higesting number of all four cities went a coffee or tea in the last 4 weeks is 63% in the brisbane this number is 55%. in this city people lowest number of fresh coffee orders and buying. on the other hand adelaide citys people did not like extere coffee or tea like only 49% of people like coffee or tea in the last week. in this chart all the data in only 4 weeks for four cities. lots of people going to cafe from coffee or tea but the other hand many of people bought instant ih the 4 week. and lowest of people bought a tea in cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and mention several relevant comparisons, including café visits in Melbourne and Adelaide and fresh-coffee purchases in Brisbane. However, the response reports key figures inaccurately: Sydney’s fresh-coffee figure is about 44%, not 60%, and the 60% figure is not the proportion buying tea. The chart does not give tea purchases separately. The overview is also unclear and includes unsupported claims such as people having “lowest” tea purchases in cafés. The response contains 142 words, below the 150-word minimum; 11 words copied from the prompt are excluded from this count. To improve, give a clear overview of the main patterns and accurately compare the three activities across all five cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move between cities and to contrast café visits with instant-coffee purchases, using phrases such as “on the other hand.” However, the information is presented as one continuous block, with no clear paragraphing or overall progression from an overview to supporting details. Several transitions do not clarify the relationship between ideas, and references such as “this number” are difficult to follow because the preceding figures are inaccurate or unclear. The final sentences repeat broad points rather than completing a structured comparison. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, grouping comparable figures and using clear references to each activity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fresh coffee,” “instant,” “survey,” and “in the last 4 weeks,” so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations make the meaning unclear, for example “bigest number,” “higesting number,” “extere coffee,” and “lowest of people bought a tea in cafe.” Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “sydney,” “adelaide,” and “ih.” Use standard chart language and accurate collocations to describe proportions and activities. For example, say that residents “bought instant coffee” or “visited a café,” rather than describing people as liking or ordering coffee when the chart measures different behaviours.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “on the other hand,” but most sentence patterns are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “in the sydney bigest number of people bought a fresh coffee,” “In the Melbourne higesting number,” and “in this chart all the data in only 4 weeks.” These show problems with sentence formation, articles, verb forms, and prepositions. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several sentences beginning in lowercase and full stops used where the ideas are not complete. Practise writing clear subject–verb sentences, such as “Sydney had the highest proportion of fresh-coffee buyers,” and check each sentence for a complete verb and a clear comparison.

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