Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart show the report of a survey about Australian people's coffe and tea purchase and drinking habits in diffrent cities.

Overall, the coffee and tea drinking in diffrent cities in Australia is show im diffrent cetogries. The trend show last 4 week reasult in percentage. The brought fresh coffee in last weeks is not popular where as, the habit went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is regular upward in all cities.

The sedney and melbourne people habit is same at bought fresh and instant coffee. In brisbane the people used to go in a cafe for coffee or tea. The adelaide cities is at same percentage in the habit of bought instant coffee where as, the people also go in cafe for coffee or tea as same percentage.

Hobart cities show the up ward percentage in all trend it is most popular in all diffrent cities .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and refer to all three activities, but the main features are not reported accurately or clearly enough. The overview says café visits show a “regular upward” trend, although the figures vary by city and are highest in Melbourne and Hobart, not consistently rising. The claim that Hobart has the highest percentage “in all trend” is also incorrect: it leads in instant coffee, while Melbourne is slightly highest for café visits and Sydney for fresh coffee. Some comparisons, such as Adelaide’s similar figures for instant coffee and café visits, are relevant, but the response gives no clear numerical support and several city descriptions are vague. Select the highest and lowest results and compare the three activities more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction, an overview and city-specific comments, so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body does not systematically compare the three activities or move through the cities in a clear order. Linking phrases such as “where as” and “also” are used, but the relationships they signal are sometimes unclear; for example, the Adelaide sentence combines two comparisons without explaining them. The final paragraph introduces Hobart abruptly and does not connect its claim to the earlier discussion. A clearer structure—overview followed by comparisons of café visits, fresh coffee and instant coffee—would make the information easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “survey,” “percentage,” “popular,” and “habit,” and the reader can generally recognise the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report unclear, such as “the report of a survey,” “regular upward,” and “up ward percentage.” Repetition of “habit,” “cities,” and “trend” also limits precision. There are frequent spelling errors, including “coffe,” “diffrent,” “cetogries,” and “sedney,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the writing. Build a small set of precise chart-reporting expressions, such as “the proportion of residents,” “recorded the highest figure,” and “was lower than,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and errors are frequent. Subject–verb agreement is inaccurate in “The bar chart show” and “The trend show”; verb forms are also faulty in “is show” and “people used to go,” which suggests a past habit rather than reporting survey results. Articles, plurals and sentence construction are often problematic, as in “The adelaide cities is at same percentage.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison hard to understand. Practise accurate present-tense reporting structures, for example, “The chart shows…” and “The proportion in Adelaide was similar for…,” then check agreement and articles in each sentence.

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