Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the out come of a collecting data about people's coffee while tea buying and drinking habits in five cities namely, Sydeny, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall, these five cities alot of people have utilize coffee and tea, first of all

i have tell about the Melbourne the highest figure 64% went to cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks while 53% bought instant coffee in last four weeks, Adelaide had been lowest figure under the 50% frish coffee in last four weeks.

Sydney, Melbourne and the Hobart have highest figure by percentage of the city residents 61%, 64% while 63% of went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks, then the second number of have five cities have bought instant coffee in last four weeks had a percentage is 54%, 50%, 53%, 47% and 41%, at the last and the lowest percentage of the fish coffe have the high in Sydney have 44% , Melbourne is just 42%, Hobart have 38%, Brisbane and Adelaide are nearly to each other.

Inconclusion all the cities have alot numbers of peoples have utiliz the coffee and tea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and name all five cities, and you include several relevant figures, such as café visits in Sydney and Hobart and fresh-coffee purchases in Sydney and Melbourne. However, the response only partially selects and reports the main features. The overview is unclear, and the claim that “Adelaide had been lowest figure under the 50% fresh coffee” misidentifies the lowest fresh-coffee rates: Brisbane and Adelaide are both about 34.5%. Some figures are also inaccurate or difficult to assign; for example, Melbourne’s café figure is about 63.5%, not 64% exactly (a small approximation is acceptable), while the instant-coffee sequence is not clearly linked to cities and includes incorrect values. Focus on accurate comparisons and state the main pattern clearly: café visits lead in most cities, while instant coffee exceeds fresh coffee everywhere.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview, a body paragraph and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise a basic structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow. The overview begins “Overall, these five cities…” but does not clearly summarise the key pattern, and the long sentence beginning “Sydney, Melbourne and the Hobart…” combines café figures, instant-coffee figures and fresh-coffee figures without clear links. Connect each comparison to its city and category, and group related data into separate sentences or paragraphs. Linking phrases such as “while” and “then” are used, but sometimes mechanically or inaccurately; clearer referencing and a more consistent order would make the information easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “bought instant coffee” and “went to a cafe,” which helps communicate the chart’s subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms and spellings make the report less clear or natural. Examples include “out come,” “collecting data,” “utilize coffee and tea,” “frish coffee” and “the fish coffe.” Repeated use of “highest figure” and “lowest percentage” also limits precision, especially when the categories are not clearly named. Use standard chart-reporting expressions such as “the proportion of residents,” “recorded the highest share” and “purchased fresh coffee.” Check spelling and choose verbs that accurately describe the survey responses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic past-tense reporting, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between figures hard to understand. For example, “these five cities alot of people have utilize” lacks a clear sentence structure and has incorrect verb form, while “Adelaide had been lowest figure” is missing an article and a suitable grammatical construction. In “the second number of have five cities have bought instant coffee,” the subject and verb pattern are unclear. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, particularly in the long data sentence. Build accurate simple sentences first, using patterns such as “In Sydney, 45.5% bought instant coffee,” then combine comparisons with correctly formed clauses.

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