Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the finding of a survey regarding to purchasing and consumption of tea and coffee in five cities in Australia.

Overall, the proportion of people who went to cafe for coffee and tea is the greatest over the period while the figure for instant coffee was flactuated. The proportion of fresh coffee

rosed significantly and then fell to just below 50%.

The sydney received approximately 43% for fresh coffee and then slightly decreased to 41% in Melbourne while the Brisbane and Adelaide the proportion is around about 33%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make an attempt at an overview by noting café visits and instant coffee. However, the overview is not accurate: café attendance is not the greatest “over the period” because the chart compares cities, and fresh coffee does not rise and then fall; it is highest in Sydney and Melbourne, lower in Brisbane and Adelaide, and somewhat higher in Hobart. The response reports only a few fresh-coffee figures and omits the key café and instant-coffee comparisons, so the task is addressed only minimally. It is also 58 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the main features. Include a clear overview and compare all three categories across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then a detail about fresh coffee. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the response is very short and does not develop a logical sequence of comparisons; it stops after discussing only part of one category. Connections between ideas are also unclear in phrases such as “while the Brisbane and Adelaide,” which leaves the comparison incomplete. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped details, and guide the reader through the cities or categories in a consistent order. Clearer linking and complete sentences would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “survey,” “bar chart,” and “instant coffee,” and the general topic remains understandable. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “illustrates” and “significantly.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “finding of a survey,” “regarding to purchasing,” and “received approximately 43%” do not express the intended meaning naturally. “Flactuated” is misspelled, and “rosed” is an incorrect word form. Build a more reliable range of chart language, for example “survey results,” “the proportion who bought,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and an attempt at a longer comparison, so there is some structural variety. The opening sentence communicates the chart topic, and the overview attempts to connect several observations. However, control is inconsistent: “regarding to purchasing” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, while “the Brisbane and Adelaide the proportion is” has faulty sentence structure and agreement. The sentence beginning “The Sydney received” also uses an unclear subject and does not form a sound comparison. Articles and prepositions are not consistently controlled, as in “went to cafe.” Practise accurate comparative sentences and check that each clause has a clear subject and verb; this will make your meaning more dependable.

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