Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph shows informtion about coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in australia.Sydney,Melbourne,brisbane,Adelaide and Hobart are the cities mentioned in graph.

In sydney fourty percent resedients buy fresh coffee in last 4 weeks ,fourty five percent buy instant coffee and sixty percent citizens buy went to cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks.There is a increase in percentage of people in melbourne went to cafe or tea in last four weeks and also a decrease in percentage of people about fourty percent people bought fresh coffee.There is clearly visible that in adelaide only thirty percent of people prefer fresh coffee as compare to other sities which is quite lowest than other cities.In brisbane fifty percent people bought instant coffee.

In hobart thirty five percent people bought fresh coffee and sixty percent people went to cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and mention all five cities, with some relevant figures, such as Sydney’s café attendance and Brisbane’s instant-coffee purchases. However, the response has no clear overview of the main patterns, and several details are inaccurate: Adelaide’s fresh-coffee figure is about 34.5%, not 30%, while Hobart’s is about 38.5%, not 35%; café attendance in Melbourne and Hobart is also around 63%, rather than the less precise claims given. The comparison that Adelaide is lowest for fresh coffee is not correct, as Brisbane and Adelaide are approximately equal. The response is 132 words, below the 150-word minimum. Add an overview and accurately compare the highest and lowest results across the three categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic city-by-city sequence, beginning with Sydney and then moving through Melbourne, Adelaide, Brisbane and Hobart. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “There is” signal a shift to another observation. However, there is no distinct overview or paragraphing to guide the reader from the main trends to supporting details. Several ideas are joined in long, awkward strings, particularly the Sydney sentence, while the repeated “and also” and “There is” do little to show precise relationships between comparisons. Grouping information by category—for example, comparing café visits across all cities, then coffee purchases—would create clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “percentage,” and “cities,” so the basic subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “people buy went to cafe,” “prefer fresh coffee,” and “as compare to other sities.” Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “informtion,” “resedients,” and “fourty,” and they reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Use precise reporting language such as “the proportion of residents who bought” and “visited a café,” and check spelling carefully. A wider set of comparison terms, including “highest,” “lowest,” and “approximately equal,” would help describe the data more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic present-tense reporting, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “There is a increase in percentage of people in melbourne went to cafe” combines incompatible structures; it could be written as “The proportion of Melbourne residents who visited a café was higher.” In “fourty percent resedients buy fresh coffee in last 4 weeks,” articles and prepositions are missing, and the sentence pattern is incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with city names often lower-case and several sentences running together. Practise accurate relative clauses and past-tense reporting, and separate each comparison into a complete sentence with correct articles and punctuation.

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