Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the outcome of a survey that was conducted in five distinct cities of Australia about habits of having and purchasing coffee and tea in the last 4 weeks.
Overall, the percentage of dine-in cafe for tea and coffee was the highest, while the figures for buying fresh coffee were relatively the lowest in the lst 4 weeks.
To begin with, the proportion of people who bought fresh coffee was approximately 43% in both Sydeny and Melbourne, however these figures decreased just under 35% in Brisbane and Adelaide. The percentage of Hobart city was more as compared to brisbane and Adeliade which was around 38%.
Moving further, the percentage of people who bought instant coffee and went to cofe were 45% and 60% respectively in Sydney, whereas these figures were recorded around 5% more in Melbourne. The difference between people who went to cafe and bought instant coffee was roughly 2% in Brisbane, but the percenatge of residents who preferred dine in and purchased instant coffee was same. The percenatge of Hobart resident for both habits were 55% and 65%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the highest and lowest trends across the five cities. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the comparison between cities is occasionally confusing, particularly in the final paragraph where the data points for Brisbane and Hobart are presented in a way that is difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that comparisons are clearly linked to the specific data points provided in the chart, and avoid vague phrasing like 'around 5% more' without clearly stating the base value. The overview is present but could be more precise in highlighting the most significant trends across all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Moving further' are used to structure the response. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between cities becomes muddled. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly follows from the previous one, maintaining a consistent focus on the data being compared.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing for the description of trends and percentages. There are some spelling errors, such as 'Sydeny', 'cofe', 'percenatge', and 'Adeliade', which are distracting. Additionally, the phrasing 'dine-in cafe for tea and coffee' is slightly unnatural; 'visiting a cafe' or 'dine-in coffee/tea consumption' would be more precise. To improve, work on using more sophisticated collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion' or 'a marginal difference', and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that detract from the professional tone of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'The percentage of Hobart city was more as compared to brisbane', which should be 'The percentage in Hobart was higher compared to Brisbane'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are occasionally problematic. While the errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general meaning, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, practice constructing complex sentences with accurate subordinate clauses and pay closer attention to comparative structures, ensuring that you are comparing like with like (e.g., comparing percentages with percentages).
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