Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The above graph illustrates, the survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Overall, the people who went to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks are more in cities as compared to bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks and people who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is low.

Moreover, the people in Sydney has gone to a cafe for coffee or tea in last weeks which is 60% the people bought instant coffee is about 45% and people bought fresh coffee is 39%. The Melbourne has highest number of people went to cafe is around 63% and bought instant coffee is 48% and fresh coffee bought is 43%.

The next is Brisbane has also people went to cafe for coffee is 55% and bought instant coffee is 54% and bought fresh coffee is 34%. The Adelaide people bought instant coffee is little more 50% and people went to cafe is 49% and bought fresh coffee is around 34%. The Hobart has 63% went to cafe and who bought instant coffee is 54% and who bought fresh coffee is 38%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the data and made relevant comparisons between the five cities. You covered all three categories (cafe visits, instant coffee, and fresh coffee) and provided data for each. However, the response lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you attempted an 'Overall' paragraph, it is slightly confusing and could be more clearly structured to highlight the most significant trends, such as the general preference for cafe visits over home-brewed coffee across all cities. To improve, ensure your summary highlights the most striking differences or similarities rather than just listing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the flow between sentences is somewhat mechanical. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and repetitive phrasing (e.g., 'the people... is... and... is...'). The use of cohesive devices is limited; you could improve by using more varied linking words or phrases to connect your comparisons, such as 'In contrast,' 'Similarly,' or 'Meanwhile,' to create a smoother progression of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to distinguish between the different categories of data.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You repeat phrases like 'people who went to' and 'people bought' frequently. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim for more variety in your verbs and nouns to describe the data, such as 'the proportion of residents,' 'frequented,' 'purchased,' or 'consumed.' There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'is low' (which should be 'is the lowest') and 'little more 50%' (which should be 'slightly over 50%').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentence structures, but there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'The Melbourne has' (should be 'Melbourne has') and 'The next is Brisbane has also people' (which is grammatically awkward). Additionally, your punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, and ensure that your basic subject-verb agreement is consistent throughout the text.

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