Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The bar chart illustrates a study of people's drinking habit, buying coffee and tea ,in five different states in Australia.
Overall, people would rather go to a cafe and have their drink there, mostly in Melbourne, apart from purchasing fresh coffee and instant coffee.
Except for Adelaide, visiting a cafe is popular in all cities. In towns like Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart residents mostly went to cafe . Almost 60-65% of people choose cafes . In Brisbane a little over 55% of people go to cafes. In contrast , Adelaide shows an opposite trend , less than 50% of people prefer cafes.
When it comes to buying instant coffee , there are a little fluctuations in 5 states. Hobart hold the top position with a little less than 55% and Brisbane with over 50%. But only in Adelaide , 50% of individuals buy instant coffee compare to two other categories.
In terms of purchasing fresh coffee , Sydney top the chart with almost 45% . Adelaide and Brisbane have the lowest percentage of buying fresh coffee. In Melbourne and in Hobart over 40% and less than 40% of individuals buy fresh coffee.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the chart and provided relevant comparisons across the five cities. You covered all three categories (cafe visits, instant coffee, and fresh coffee) and highlighted key differences, such as Adelaide's unique trends. To reach a higher band, ensure your overview is more comprehensive; currently, it focuses only on cafe visits. Additionally, some data points are slightly imprecise (e.g., 'a little over 55%'), which could be improved by referencing the specific figures more accurately. Overall, you have addressed the requirements of the task well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized, with each paragraph focusing on a specific category of the survey. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In contrast', 'When it comes to', and 'In terms of', which help guide the reader. However, the transition between sentences could be smoother, and some referencing is slightly repetitive. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different data sets. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is more fluid rather than just listing statistics.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'top position', and 'opposite trend'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'drinking habit' (should be plural) and 'In towns like Melbourne' (these are cities, not towns). You also repeat the word 'people' and 'buy' quite frequently. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms for data-related verbs and nouns to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'Hobart hold the top position' (subject-verb agreement), 'compare to' (should be 'compared to'), and missing articles before 'cafe'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, though there are some inconsistent spaces before commas. To achieve a higher score, focus on correcting subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent use of articles. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also help elevate your score.
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