Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the outcome of evaluation done of people's buying and drinking habits on coffee and tea's accross five austrailian cities. At a glance it appears that Y axis is about percentage of city residents and X axis says about people of those cities bought or went to the cafe in the previous month.
Overall ,it is noticeable that Adelaide includes folks that purchase less fresh coffee to instant and loves to go to cafes for having teas and coffees there.
On about more than 40% people of sydney and Melboune including people obtains fresh coffee and likewise for instants ,while it is observed that greater than 60% of residents like to go out for cafes more.
For brisbane and adelaide, residents acquire less fresh coffee's and more instant coffees on about 50% almost ,whereas we can also see about the same percentage is for cafes there.Now for Hobart it seems that people are more invested in cafes over having an fresh or an instant coffee's
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it identifies some specific figures, the reporting is often inaccurate or vague, such as stating 'on about 50% almost' for Brisbane and Adelaide, which does not accurately reflect the data points. The response lacks a systematic comparison between the cities, and the description of the axes is unnecessary and distracts from the task. To improve, you should focus on grouping the data logically (e.g., comparing the highest and lowest performers) rather than listing cities individually without clear analytical purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'At a glance it appears that...' and 'Now for Hobart...'. The transition between sentences is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the five cities. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear progression of ideas. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Similarly', 'Conversely') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'outcome of evaluation done of', 'folks that purchase', and 'invested in cafes'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle to use precise terminology related to data analysis. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to charts and trends, such as 'a significant proportion', 'the majority of', or 'a notable difference'. Avoid informal language like 'folks' and ensure you use accurate terminology for the data categories provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Adelaide includes folks that purchase'), incorrect pluralization (e.g., 'coffee's', 'instants'), and awkward sentence structures. The use of articles is also inconsistent throughout the text. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed and contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of plural nouns. Proofreading for common errors like unnecessary apostrophes will also significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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