Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrate information about a different cities like Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in Australia. To buy and drinking habits of coffee and tea.
Overall, Most of people prefer to going cafe for coffee or tea. But tiny people buy fresh coffee. At last the all most indivisuals like a coffee compare to tea.
In Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart three type catogary first buy fresh coffee second buy instant coffee and go to cafe in this three cities less buyer of fresh coffee Sydney 44% Melbourne 43% and Hobart 39%. Although many people buy. instant coffee like in Sydney about 45% then in Melbourne 47% and Hobart 54%. then going to cafe people very large his portion in three cities up to 60%.
Other two cities Brisbane and Adelaide which have instant coffee and went to. cafe and bought fresh coffee almost same portion. Brisbane instant coffee buyer 53% while went to cafe coffee people 55% bought fresh coffee then Adelaide minor diffrence buy fresh coffee people 50% while cafe people 49% after fresh coffee owened 34%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the data provided in the chart. However, the overview is weak and lacks clarity, and the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the statement 'tiny people buy fresh coffee' is unclear and does not accurately reflect the percentages shown. While the response identifies the five cities and the three categories, the lack of precise data interpretation and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the cities significantly hinders the task achievement. The response would benefit from a more structured approach to highlighting the main trends and significant differences rather than listing percentages in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used in a very limited and often mechanical way, such as the repetitive use of 'then' and 'while'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the cities. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks coherence, as sentences are often disconnected. To improve, you should focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey information precisely. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'tiny people' instead of 'a small percentage' and 'his portion' when referring to data. Spelling errors, such as 'indivisuals' and 'catogary', are also present. While the response uses basic terms related to the topic (e.g., 'coffee', 'tea', 'cafe'), it lacks the range of vocabulary needed to describe trends or comparisons effectively. You should aim to incorporate more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'minority', and 'fluctuate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate'), incorrect sentence fragments, and awkward phrasing that makes some sentences difficult to parse. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are generally inaccurate, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with periods placed incorrectly within sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Reducing the number of errors in simple sentences should be your primary goal before attempting more complex structures.
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