Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates the survey about the purchasing of tea, coffee and drinking habits of people in five cities of Australia in last four weeks.
Graph displays the forty-three percent people of Sydney, forty-one percent people of Melbourne, thirty-four percent of Brisbane and Adelaide and thirty-six percent of Hobart bought fresh coffee.
The people of more than sixty percent of Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart went to the cafe for coffee or tea. While only fifty-five percent of Brisbane and forty-nine percent of Adelaide went to the cafe for coffee or tea. The more than fifty-five percent people of these five cities bought coffee in last four weeks.
Overall, people in Hobart drink most instant and fresh coffee and went to the cafe for coffee and tea among all thee five cities of Australia. The people of Adelaide drank least instant coffee, fresh coffee and went to the cafe for coffee and tea as compared to give five cities of Australia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the percentages for fresh coffee and cafe visits. However, the report is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention the highest and lowest figures in the final paragraph, the summary of the data is fragmented. To improve, ensure you group the data more logically rather than listing percentages city by city. Additionally, the prompt asks for a summary of 'buying and drinking habits,' but your response focuses heavily on percentages without fully synthesizing the trends across the five cities. More careful selection of key features would lead to a more cohesive summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive. You rely on simple sentence structures to list data, which makes the flow feel mechanical. Cohesive devices are limited; for example, you use 'While' and 'Overall' to transition, but more varied linking words (e.g., 'in contrast,' 'similarly,' 'whereas') would improve the logical flow. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where 'give five cities' appears to be a typo for 'these five cities.' Improving the use of referencing and transition signals will help the reader follow your comparisons more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the basic information, but it lacks the precision and variety expected for a higher band. You repeat phrases like 'people of' and 'went to the cafe for coffee or tea' multiple times. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'the purchasing of tea, coffee and drinking habits' and 'most instant and fresh coffee.' To reach a higher band, try to use more sophisticated synonyms and vary your phrasing to avoid repetition. Using words like 'proportion,' 'consumption,' or 'frequented' would demonstrate a stronger command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'Graph displays,' 'in last four weeks'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'The more than fifty-five percent people'). There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct article usage, and ensuring subject-verb agreement will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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