Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The givenn Bar graph illustrate the results about a survey conducted about people bought beverages in different five cities of Australia in last 4 weeks.
Overall, Number of People from Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart visited cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks were highest while other cities Brisbane and Adelaide were near half. Fresh coffee prefered by less people than instant cofffee in all residential cities.Instant coffee bought more than half of visitors in Brisbane and Hobart.
Fresh coffee remains less favourite of all cities, In Brisbane and Adelaide it was at lowest sale near 35% people only prefer,likewise less than 40% Hobart people bought it.in Sydney and Melbourne people taken fresh coffee mid range of 40-45% but still its less favourite than instant coffee.
Instant coffee preferd by all the five type citizens than fresh one.Hobart and Brisbane range was highest more than 50% ,also 50% of Adelaiade people prefer it .In Melbourne and Sydney it remains up 45% of resdinatls favorite.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the chart. You have identified the key trends, such as the preference for instant coffee over fresh coffee across all cities and the variations in cafe visitation. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, stating 'near 35%' or 'mid range of 40-45%' is somewhat vague, and the comparison between cities could be more structured. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the three categories (Cafe, Fresh, Instant) and provide more accurate numerical comparisons to support your observations, rather than relying on general descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. There are issues with punctuation, such as the comma splice in 'Fresh coffee remains less favourite of all cities, In Brisbane and Adelaide...', which disrupts the logical progression. While you use some cohesive devices, they are used repetitively. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your paragraphing is used to group related ideas more effectively, such as separating the cafe visitation data from the coffee type preferences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'givenn', 'prefered', 'cofffee', 'resdinatls') and some awkward phrasing. You rely on a limited range of words to describe trends, such as 'favourite' and 'range'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'consumption', or 'preference'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, as these errors can distract the reader and limit your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Number of People... were highest'), missing articles ('visited cafe'), and incorrect verb forms ('people taken fresh coffee'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the use of articles and consistent verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.
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