Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart shows the result of survey about the people coffee and tea buying or drinking habits in five australian cities . the percentage of five citiy residents to consume the coffee or the tea . first top high city is melburne in the city people went to the cafe for coffee or tea is 64% in last 4 weeks and buy the instant coffee is 48% in last 4 weeks and the last percentage of 42% peope bought fresh coffee in the last . and the second high drinking habit city is hobart the people habit perscentage 64% of went to a coffee or tea in the last 4 weeks but the people bought the coffee is higher than the melbourne people to bought instant coffee in the last 4 weeks or the percentage of people bought the fresh coffee is 38% . and the other city is sydney people percentage to went to a cafe for coffee or tea in the last 4 weeks and the other percentage is between 42 to 46% and the next city is brisbane the percentage is56% people went to a cafe for coffee or tea and the same weeks and the similare condition is the other city
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. While it mentions several cities and percentages, the data is presented in a fragmented and repetitive manner. Key comparisons are missing, and the information is not organized into a coherent report. The response lacks a clear structure, such as an introduction or a summary paragraph, which is essential for Task 1. Many figures are presented without context or clear grouping, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main trends across the five cities. To improve, you should group data logically (e.g., by category or by city) and ensure you highlight the most significant differences and similarities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. It is written as a single, run-on block of text with very few cohesive devices. The use of 'and' to connect almost every clause makes the writing repetitive and difficult to follow. There is no clear structure to guide the reader through the data. Referencing is often unclear, such as 'the other city' or 'the same weeks', which does not effectively link back to the data provided. To improve, you must organize your response into distinct paragraphs (introduction, overview, and body paragraphs) and use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'city', 'people', and 'percentage' without variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'top high city' instead of 'the city with the highest percentage' or 'drinking habit city'. The lack of precise terminology to describe data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for') makes the report sound informal and imprecise. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and try to avoid repeating the same words in close proximity. Using synonyms and more sophisticated descriptors will significantly enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation. Many sentences lack a clear subject or verb, such as 'the percentage of five citiy residents to consume the coffee or the tea'. Additionally, there are consistent errors with articles ('the coffee', 'the tea'), pluralization ('citiy'), and verb forms ('people went to the cafe... is 64%'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles.
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