Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the results of a study conducted about the buying of people of coffee and drinking habits in five cities of Australia. Looking at the details, more than sixty percent people of Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart specially went to the cafe for coffee and tea in last 4 week. The people of Adelaide and Brisbane showed less interest, only near to thirty-five percent of people bought fresh coffee in the last month. More than thirty-five percent individuals of Hobart purchased fresh coffee in the preceding four weeks. Slightly above forty-percent citizens of Melbourne and Sydney spent money on fresh coffee in previous four weeks. Overall, more than forty-five percent of people in all the given five cities of Australia bought instant coffee. Altogether, the people of Sydney remains on top among all other countries in buying instant or fresh coffee and going to cafeteria for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying trends across the five cities. However, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, cohesive structure. While you have selected key data points, the comparison between cities could be more sophisticated. For instance, instead of listing percentages for each city individually, grouping them by high and low performers would demonstrate better analytical skills. Additionally, the final sentence contains a factual error by referring to the cities as 'countries', which impacts the accuracy of the report. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data is interpreted accurately and that the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. A standard IELTS Task 1 response should be divided into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group related information. While there is a basic attempt at linking ideas, the use of cohesive devices is limited and somewhat mechanical. The transition between the description of coffee habits and the final summary is abrupt. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis and employ a wider range of linking words to connect your sentences more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'people of' and 'bought'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'buying of people of coffee', which is grammatically confusing. The use of 'cafeteria' is slightly imprecise in the context of modern coffee culture, where 'café' or 'coffee shop' would be more natural. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'purchased' or 'consumed' and use more precise terminology to describe the data trends, such as 'a significant proportion' or 'a marginal difference'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. For example, 'more than sixty percent people of Sydney' should be 'more than sixty percent of people in Sydney'. There are also issues with article usage and prepositions, such as 'in last 4 week' instead of 'in the last four weeks'. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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