Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the survey about individuals buying coffee and tea and drinking habits in five various australian cities.
On the other hand, bought fres coffee in last 4 weeks over the same number of percentage in Sydney and Melbourne. Same percentage of residents in Brisbane and Adelaide noted as 34% whereas over the 40% of people's shown by hobart. The maximum percentage of buying instant coffee in last 4 weeks shows by hobart city. In Sydney and Melbourne bought instant coffee 45 and about 50 percentage residents. 54 and 50 percentage of individuals shown by Brisbane and Adelaide respectively.
Went to a cafe for the coffee or tea in last 4 weeks 60 and 64% of people's shown by sydney and Melbourne. However, In Brisbane and Adelaide 55% and over 50 percentage of city residents.In the city of Hobart shown the percentage of residents about the 65% by went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the data, such as the high cafe attendance in Hobart and the trends in coffee consumption. However, the report lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. Furthermore, the comparison between cities is often mechanical, and the data reporting is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as the phrasing 'over the 40% of people's shown by hobart'. To improve, you should group the data more logically and provide a clear summary statement at the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often awkward or incorrect, such as starting a paragraph with 'On the other hand' when no previous contrast was established. The referencing is also unclear; for example, '54 and 50 percentage of individuals shown by Brisbane and Adelaide' lacks a clear subject. The flow between sentences is disjointed, making the text feel like a series of isolated observations rather than a unified report. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear subject-verb agreement will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'percentage', 'shown', and 'people's'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms, such as 'bought fres coffee' (spelling error) and 'people's shown by hobart'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. You should aim to use a wider variety of reporting verbs (e.g., 'accounted for', 'represented', 'peaked at') and more precise nouns to describe the data trends, which will help you move beyond a basic level of description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments ('Went to a cafe for the coffee or tea in last 4 weeks 60 and 64% of people's shown by sydney and Melbourne'), and incorrect preposition usage. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and the use of articles is often missing or misused. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are frequently faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject, verb, and object—will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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