Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Following figure shoes the information about the people how drink and bye coffee and tea in five Australian cities

In Melbourne, The percentage was height and in Adelaide the percentage

In start the Sydney has a large ratio of buying coffee in last four weeks

and Brisbane has lowest ratio of buying coffee the Sydney has highest percentage in bought instant coffee in last four weeks , went to a cafe for coffee and tea in last four weeks and Adelaide has low ratio of bought fresh coffee in last four weeks , went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks Hobart, Melbourne and Hobart had up to 55% in went to cafe foe coffee or tea in last four weeks and Brisbane, Adelaide has low ratio from 35% in bought fresh coffee in last four weeks.All cities had percentage up to 45% in bought instant coffee in last four weeks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the data. While it mentions several cities and categories, the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. Key features are not clearly highlighted, and the comparisons are often inaccurate or difficult to follow due to poor sentence structure. The response lacks a coherent structure, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main trends in coffee and tea consumption across the five cities. To improve, focus on grouping data logically (e.g., by category or by city) and providing a clear summary statement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical progression. Ideas are presented in a disjointed way, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or clauses. The paragraphing is ineffective, with the text appearing as a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive report. Referencing is often unclear, and the lack of transition words makes the text difficult to navigate. To improve, use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect ideas, and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for coffee habits and another for cafe visits.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'ratio', 'percentage', and 'bought'. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'Following figure shoes' (instead of 'The following figure shows') and 'large ratio' (instead of 'high proportion'). The misuse of terms like 'ratio' when referring to percentages indicates a lack of precision. To improve, expand your range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'trend', and 'consumption', and ensure you use them in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'people how drink' (who drink) and 'Sydney has highest percentage in bought' (in buying). Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, making the text difficult to parse. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing articles and incorrect capitalization. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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