Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the information about five cities of Australia namely,Sydney, Melbourne,Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in which compares the people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits.
Overall, Hobart and Melbourne recorded highest percentage about people visit to a cafe for coffee whether tea in last 4 weeks.In contrast, Adelaide showed least figure while Sydney and Brisbane consistuted moderate figure.
Firstly, Melbourne and Hobart gain increased significantly approximately 64% of total in visit to cafe for coffee or tea previous 4 weeks.While Hobart showed highest figure about 55% buying instant coffee whereas Melbourne recorded 48%.Furthermore, Melbourne recorded purchasing of fresh coffee around 43% . However Hobart showed 37%.
Turning to Sydney recorded second highest about 60% in terms of went to visit cafe for tea or coffee and fresh showed 43% and instant showed 45%.Brisbane and Adelaide showed moderate about
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the report is incomplete; it stops abruptly mid-sentence when discussing Brisbane and Adelaide, meaning the data for these cities is not fully presented or compared. While the introduction and overview attempt to identify main features, the lack of completion prevents a full summary of the information. To improve, ensure all data points are covered and the response reaches the required length by providing a comprehensive analysis of all categories across all five cities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contrast', 'Firstly', and 'Turning to', but they are sometimes used mechanically or with awkward phrasing (e.g., 'in terms of went to visit'). The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel disjointed. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph is fully developed would enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and unidiomatic phrasing, such as 'gain increased significantly' and 'consituted moderate figure'. The repetition of 'figure' and 'showed' limits the range of expression. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more varied reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'accounted for', 'represented', or 'proportion', and ensure that collocations are accurate, such as 'purchasing fresh coffee' rather than 'recorded purchasing of fresh coffee'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('in which compares'), missing articles ('in last 4 weeks'), and awkward sentence construction ('Sydney recorded second highest about 60% in terms of went to visit'). These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly difficult to follow. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Increasing the accuracy of basic sentence structures will provide a stronger foundation before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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