Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided bar graph coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five differant nations in Austraila.
Overall, it is clear that the maxinum ratio of city residents in melboume. However, the minimum percentage of city residents in adelaide.
Looking the bar graph, the highest percentage of city residents in Melboume, which is more then 65% following by sydney 61% and hobart 63%, respectively. There are a minor differance between Adelaide and Brisbane.
It can be seen that the lowest ratio of city residents in brisbane approximately 35per cent. The Coffe and Tea buying drinking habits in five Unique Nation in Austraila Such as Sydney, Melboume and Hobart. brought freash coffee in last 4 weeks only 1 month and a number of people went to cafe for coffe in last 1 month in Hobart. The similer percentage of cafe in Sydney and Melboume like 40 per
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you attempted to identify some main features, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear, accurate overview of the data. Several statements are confusing or factually unclear, such as the claim that there are 'five differant nations in Austraila' (these are cities, not nations). Furthermore, the data reporting is inconsistent and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the prompt. To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the chart and provide a clear, logical summary of the trends rather than fragmented observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. For example, the transition 'Looking the bar graph' is grammatically incorrect and does not effectively introduce the analysis. The final paragraph is particularly fragmented, with incomplete sentences that break the coherence of the report. You need to focus on using linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'differant', 'Austraila', 'maxinum', 'melboume', 'differance', 'freash', and 'similer'. These errors, combined with incorrect word choices (e.g., 'nations' instead of 'cities'), hinder the clarity of your writing. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use precise terminology to describe the data. To reach a higher band, you should work on spelling accuracy and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more academic terms related to describing charts and statistics, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', and 'significant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are many missing verbs (e.g., 'the highest percentage... in Melboume' instead of 'is in Melbourne') and incorrect sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the use of 'more then' instead of 'more than' is a recurring error. The attempt at complex sentences is largely unsuccessful due to these persistent errors. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and a verb—before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement is essential.
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