Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph depicts the given information that the results of a survey for people coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australian cities.
overall, the maximum bought coffee and tea and drinking habits in Melbourne, while the minimum was bought in Adelaide and Brisbane.
In detail, Sydney was bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks which was approximately 44% They bought 45% instant coffee in Sydney. After that, Sydney people went cafe for coffee or tea in last four week which was 61% in city. Fresh coffee was bought 42% in Melbourne and 43 % people bought instant coffee. Subsequently, people went to cafe for coffee was 63% near about.
In case of Brisbane and Adelaide people bought 34 % teas or coffee in last 4 weeks. 52% people bought coffee in Brisbane and 55% people bought coffee or tea at cafe. Adelaide bought 50% in last 4 weeks , Afterwords, people bought coffee from cafe 44% people. Eventually, the percentage of Hobart people for bought fresh coffee was 38% people. In last 4 week people bought 54% people in Adelaide. 62% people went to cafe for coffee or tea in Adelaide respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. While it identifies the five cities and the categories, the data points are often confusing or incorrectly reported (e.g., stating 'Sydney was bought fresh coffee' instead of referring to the percentage of people). The overview is vague and fails to highlight the most significant trends effectively. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparisons between cities. To improve, focus on clearly linking specific data points to the categories and ensuring that the overview captures the most striking differences or similarities across the cities rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often illogical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the frequent use of 'After that', 'Subsequently', and 'Eventually', which do not always accurately reflect the relationship between the data points. Referencing is often unclear, as the subject of the sentences is frequently missing or incorrectly identified (e.g., 'Adelaide bought 50%'). Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a fragmented reading experience. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring clear subject-verb agreement would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic verbs like 'bought' and 'went', which are often used incorrectly in context (e.g., 'Sydney was bought fresh coffee'). There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'near about' and 'Afterwords'. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language prevents the response from achieving a higher score. To improve, the student should learn to use more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'purchased', 'consumed', 'a significant proportion', or 'the majority', and ensure that these terms are used with correct grammatical structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as missing subjects or incorrect passive voice constructions (e.g., 'Sydney was bought fresh coffee'). Punctuation is inconsistent, and there are errors in basic sentence formation, such as 'the percentage of Hobart people for bought fresh coffee was 38% people'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions and articles, which are currently causing confusion throughout the text.
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