Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrate a ones survey results about human's buying and drinking both coffee and tea which habits in five Different Australian cities which is Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane , Adelaide and Hobart.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that highest amount of buying and drinking coffee and tea in Melbourne. While lowest amount in Brisbane. Moreover three type of method which was bought fresh coffee, instant coffee, went to a cafe for coffee in last four week.
In Melbourne picked point of 63% went to cafe for drinking coffee. while lowest amount in Brisbane of 34%. In Hobart that three type of catergeoy slightly increased.
In Sydney bought fest coffee in last for week and instant coffee both were almost percentage of 44%.and went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 week in perceantage of 62%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you have identified some main features, the summary is incomplete and lacks a comprehensive overview of the data. The reporting of figures is often inaccurate or unclear, such as the vague reference to 'three type of method' and the confusing description of percentages in Sydney. To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the chart and provide a clear, accurate summary of the data trends. The under-length penalty is applied here as the response is 10 words short of the requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often incorrect, such as starting sentences with 'While' or 'Moreover' without proper clause structures. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the five cities. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that links back to the overall trend. The lack of clear structure between the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs hinders the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'amount' and 'percentage'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'fest coffee' instead of 'fresh coffee' and 'catergeoy' instead of 'category'. These errors occasionally impede communication, making it difficult to understand the specific data points being described. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'majority', or 'minority', and ensure that your spelling is accurate throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The bar graph illustrate'), incorrect article usage ('a ones survey'), and sentence fragments ('which is Sydney...'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are generally faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of the sentences contain errors, which limits the range and accuracy of your writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for simple errors like 'in last four week' would also be beneficial.
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