Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart displays that indiviuals buying and drinking tea , coffee in australian cities .

The percentage of peoples who went to cafe for tea or coffee is greater than the the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee .

First of all, in melbourne the percentage of people who went to cafe for coffee or tea was above the 60 % and the percentage of citizens who bought instant coffee was more than 45% .and also only approximately 43% persons bought fresh coffee.

THE percentage of citizens who bought instant coffee was less than 55% in hobart but more than 60% persons went to cafe for coffee or tea and only approximately 38% persons bought fresh coffee.

The percentage of persons who bought fresh coffee is less than the persontage of citizens who bought instant coffee or who went to cxoffe shop for coffee or tea in different cities like sydney , melbourne , brisbane ,adelaide and hobart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it mentions some specific figures for Melbourne and Hobart, it lacks a comprehensive comparison across all five cities. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the conclusion is vague, failing to highlight the most significant differences or similarities in the data. To improve, you should group the data more logically—perhaps by category (e.g., café visits vs. coffee purchases)—and ensure that the overview clearly identifies the most prominent patterns observed in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. The paragraphing is inconsistent, with some sentences standing alone as paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Conversely') and organize your response into a clear introduction, an overview, and two distinct body paragraphs that group related data points together.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'percentage,' 'people,' and 'bought.' There are several spelling errors, such as 'indiviuals' and 'cxoffe,' which detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'people' (e.g., 'residents,' 'citizens,' 'consumers') and use more precise verbs to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'surpassed').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with article usage ('the the percentage'), subject-verb agreement, and capitalization (e.g., 'THE percentage'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced periods and spaces. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect capitalization. Aim to incorporate more complex structures, such as relative clauses or comparative phrases, to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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