Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph depicts the information about the beverage habits of purchasing and consuming by the natives in five different cities of Australia on two items coffee and tea.
Overall, it is clear that however, Melburne, is the city where people dramatically keen to buy coffee or tea from the cafes, Bristane is less common to do that. While purchasing fresh coffee is least popular in all five cities.
Commencing with, Sydney, while individuals highly recommended to went to cafes and buy coffee or tea in person about 60 per cent, they rarely choose to consume instant and fresh coffee which accounted only 45%. Similarly, Melbourneians, use the method of going to cafes is more significant almost 65 in proportion, getting instant and fresh coffee remain on below a half of the whole. Around 55% people of Bristane purchase coffee or tea from cafes and they less interested in fresh coffee which noticed within 4 weeks.
Purchasing instant or from the cafes is on the same level in Adelaide which is 50% and they gave preference to fresh coffee only 35%. Hobart's natives buying 40% fresh coffee and more than 50% instant coffee almost 55%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the popularity of cafe visits in Melbourne and Sydney compared to other cities. However, the analysis is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the description of Hobart’s data is confusing, and the claim that fresh coffee is the least popular in all cities is not fully supported by the provided figures. The overview is somewhat disjointed due to grammatical errors, making it difficult to follow the trends. To improve, ensure that comparisons are precise and that the data points cited accurately reflect the chart provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Phrases like 'Commencing with' are used incorrectly, and the logical progression between sentences is often weak. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices, they are often misused or placed in positions that disrupt the reader's understanding. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing different cities, which makes the overall structure feel somewhat disjointed rather than a cohesive summary of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'natives' to refer to city residents, 'dramatically keen', and 'noticed within 4 weeks'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', or 'preference', and ensure that collocations are natural and appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Melbourneians, use the method... is more significant'), incorrect verb forms ('individuals highly recommended to went'), and sentence fragments. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas frequently breaking the flow of sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures, and proofread carefully to eliminate slips in tense and word order.
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