Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration depicts the outcomes of a survey about person's coffee and tea buying and drinking behaviors in five australian cities.
Overall, except the adelaide people who went cafe for coffee or tea had highest proportion whereas person who bought fresh coffee had lowest in all cities.
In Sydney people who bought fresh coffee had about 45% and the people who bought instant coffee had slight above 45% then people who went to the cafe for coffee or tea had above 60%.
Melbourne had individuals who bought fresh coffee had between 45% to 40% then person who bought instant coffee had around 50%, furthermore who went to a cafe for coffee or a tea had nearly 65%. In Brisbane had individuals who brought fresh coffee had slightly below 35% and people who brought instant coffee had between 55 to 50 per cent. and who went to cafe for coffee or tea had around 55% .
Adelaide had people who brought fresh coffee had slightly below 35% and who brought instant coffee had 50% a then who went to a cafe for coffee and tea had slightly below 50%.In the Hobart people who went to a cafe for a coffee or a tea had between 65 to 60 per cent and who brought instant and fresh coffee had around slightly below 55% and 40% respectively
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the three categories and comparing the five cities. However, the overview is poorly constructed and confusingly phrased, making it difficult to grasp the main trends immediately. While you have included data for all cities, the reporting is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear analytical focus. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant differences or similarities rather than just listing data points. The comparison between cities is present, but it could be more effectively synthesised to show the 'big picture' rather than just describing each city in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple structures like 'In [City] people who...' which makes the progression feel list-like rather than analytical. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly. For example, the transition between the description of Melbourne and Brisbane is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' 'Similarly') and ensure that your referencing (e.g., 'the former,' 'the latter') is used to avoid repeating the same nouns.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases such as 'people who bought' and 'went to a cafe'. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'brought' instead of 'bought' throughout the text. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'figure,' or 'trend,' and avoid repeating the same verbs. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated synonyms will help demonstrate a better command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the adelaide people'), subject-verb agreement, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'had slight above 45%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper structure. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic errors like verb tense consistency and ensuring that your sentences have a clear subject and verb.
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