Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart demonstrates the outcome of routine acitivities including purchase and drinking of tea and coffee in five different cities of Australia like Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane ,Adelalde and Hobart.The comparision of three habits between an individual in previous four weeks is done here.
To begin with, almost 43%population of Sydney bought highest fresh coffees in last 4 weeks. 54%people living in Hobart preferred to buy instant coffee in previous 4 weeks.Melborne's mast of the population including 63%went to cafe for either coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
The gradual decrease is seen in population buying coffee in last 4 weeks comparing Sydney with Melbourne which is from 44% to almost 42%.Brisbane and Adelaide shows almost same amount of people who preffered fresh coffee in previous 4 weeks which is around 33%.Hobert 's 38% public bought fresh coffees in the same time period.
Talking about instant coffee,Hobert's most of the population which is 53% and least population including 43% of Sydney bought istant coffees in last four weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the highest and lowest figures for different categories. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. While you have selected data points, the comparison between cities is inconsistent. For example, you mention Sydney and Melbourne for fresh coffee but fail to provide a comprehensive comparison across all five cities for each category. To reach a higher band, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear, concise summary of the overall trends rather than just listing percentages city by city.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and lacks sophisticated cohesive devices. Some transitions, such as 'To begin with' and 'Talking about', are used, but the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the connection between the data points is not always smooth. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'Adelalde', 'Melborne', 'mast', and 'istant', which detract from the overall quality. You rely on basic phrasing like 'almost same amount' and 'gradual decrease'. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that could have been avoided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles ('43% population'), incorrect preposition usage, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'Brisbane and Adelaide shows'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation limit the score. Focusing on sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.
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