Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the proportion of people who intake coffee and tea over five Australian cities namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall, individuals who went to cafes for coffee had the largest proportion in Melbourne and Hobart, which was more than the city of Brisbane and Adelaide while bought fresh coffee constituted the lowest proportion in all cities.

In general, bought fresh coffee accounted for the average share at 44% in Sydney which slipped slightly to 42% in Melbourne then agian fell to roughly 34% in Brisbane which, remained same in Adelaide then increased to 43% in Hobart. In addition, the proportion of bought instant coffee comprised to 45% in Sydney which, rose consistently to 48% and 50% in Melbourne and Adelaide respectively, while the proportion for Brisbane and Hobart maintained slightly a same level at 53% and 54% individually.

However, the people who went to cafes for coffee or tea had the largest share in Sydney at 61% which increased substantially to 64% in Melbourne whereas, fell dramatically to 56% in Brisbane which was further declined to 44% in Adelaide and finally it increased sharply to 63% in the city of Hobart which was noticeable changed over five cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the three categories and comparing the five cities. However, the overview is somewhat weak; it focuses on specific details rather than highlighting the most significant trends, such as the overall dominance of cafe culture in Sydney and Melbourne compared to other cities. While the data is generally accurate, the description of the trends is occasionally confusing, particularly when discussing the 'bought fresh coffee' category, where the comparison between cities lacks clarity. To improve, ensure the overview provides a clear summary of the main features without relying on specific data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, phrases like 'which, rose consistently' and 'which was noticeable changed' create awkward pauses and grammatical friction. The transition between sentences is sometimes repetitive, relying heavily on 'which' to connect clauses. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'the latter', 'this trend') is used more effectively to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'intake coffee' (instead of 'consume' or 'drink') and 'maintained slightly a same level' (which is non-standard). The phrase 'noticeable changed' is also grammatically incorrect. While the student attempts to use descriptive language like 'increased substantially' and 'fell dramatically', the overall control of collocation is inconsistent. Expanding the range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and focusing on natural collocations would significantly improve the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'which, remained same' (missing article and incorrect punctuation) and 'comprised to 45%' (incorrect preposition). The use of commas is often intrusive, particularly before relative clauses where they are not required. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage would be beneficial.

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