Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar presentation elucidates information about , overall examination about individuals coffee and tea consumption and buying habits in five Australian nations. At a first glance it can be promptly noticed that there is overall increment in Utilization of diverse variety of tea in five nations except the fresh coffee in last month.
From the given statistic's it is apparent that , highest (64 %) individuals in Sydney visited in cafe for coffee , followed by (63%) of visit to cafe for tea by individuals belonging to Hobart whereas , least (49%) of individuals traveled coffee shop in Adelaide , while there is marginal disparity in consumption of fresh coffee in last one month in Brisbane and Adelaide as former contributes with 33% and later with 34% .
On other hand , rest of fresh coffee in Hobart , Melbourne and Sydney do not contributes less than 44 % . Moreover , sale of instant coffee by citizens in Sydney and Melbourne is reported 45% and 42% respectively , whereas sale of instant coffee in Brisbane , Adelaide and Hobart is in range between 50% and 54%.
The major conclusion that can be drawn using the graph is that highest preference is given to coffee in last one month and lowest to fresh tea in Brisbane .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the high cafe visitation in Sydney and the instant coffee sales in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the report lacks clarity in its presentation of the data. For instance, the phrase 'five Australian nations' is factually incorrect as the prompt specifies cities. Furthermore, the summary of the data is somewhat disjointed, and the final conclusion is confusing, as it mentions 'fresh tea' which is not clearly represented in the provided chart. To improve, ensure that all data points are accurately labeled and that the overview clearly synthesizes the main trends rather than just listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'At a first glance' and 'On other hand' are used, but the connection between sentences is often weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between cities. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear progression of ideas. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains several inaccuracies. There is a reliance on basic terms, and some word choices are inappropriate for an academic report, such as 'elucidates information' and 'increment in Utilization'. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'traveled coffee shop' instead of 'visited a coffee shop'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the repetitive nature of the vocabulary prevent a higher score. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise reporting verbs and comparative language would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('in cafe', 'in last month'), subject-verb agreement ('rest of fresh coffee... do not contributes'), and punctuation. The sentence structures are often repetitive and lack the complexity required for higher bands. While the meaning is usually understandable, the density of errors is high enough to cause some distraction for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the correct use of articles and prepositions, and practice incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.
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