Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart provides information about the collection of data in which people's coffee and tea purchasing and habits across five Australian cities.
Overall, the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee in the last four weeks was the highest in Sydney, while instant coffee purchased in the last four weeks was in Hobart. On the other hand, highest proportion was collected of those people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in the last four weeks.
It is quite evident from the bar chart that maximum fresh coffee purchased in Sydney around 44%. In contrast, declined in fresh coffee in last four weeks at 42% in Melbourne. The number of residents visited to a cafe for cofee or tea in last few weeks around 63% in Melbourne.
Furthermore, a very small Australians who visited to a cafe for coffee or tea in the last four weeks around 49% in Adelaide, followed by the Brisbane increased to around 56%. However, the minimum residents who purchased instant coffee in the last four weeks around 46% in Sydney.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the highest and lowest values in specific categories. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the data. While you identify some key figures, the reporting is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that instant coffee was highest in Hobart without providing the specific data point. To improve, ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the data provided and avoid vague phrasing like 'collection of data'. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant trends across the five cities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression between sentences is often weak. Some transitions, such as 'Furthermore' and 'However', are used, but they do not always connect the ideas logically. For instance, the transition between the discussion of fresh coffee and cafe visits is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which city or category is being discussed. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use basic phrases like 'the number of residents' and 'the percentage of people'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'collection of data' instead of 'survey results' and 'maximum fresh coffee purchased' instead of 'the highest proportion of fresh coffee'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'trend', 'fluctuation', or 'predominant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Many sentences lack necessary verbs or articles, such as 'maximum fresh coffee purchased in Sydney around 44%' (should be 'was around 44%') and 'a very small Australians' (should be 'a very small percentage of Australians'). Sentence structures are often simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are frequently faulty. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that every sentence contains a main verb. Proofreading for basic articles and prepositions will also help reduce the frequency of these errors.
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